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Peeing Is Ignominious For Girls


Youthful Trip to Remote Knolls (without A)

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Oh my. I had never heard of the Teddy Boys, so yes this most definitely is a fine story told without the letter A.

Those older cousins can lead one astray on occasion.

Great job with this Kate. :))

Gloria


 Comment Written 23-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for reviewing, Kate xx
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I remember hearing about the Teddies" in the fifties (although it was during the rise of the Beatles, so wouldn't that have placed it in the 60s?) Anyway, in America, they didn't call them Teddy Boys. As I recall there were two opposing groups energizing music of the day. I only remember the "Rockers", not what the other group was called. I think the Rockers were on motorcycles and looked hairy and dirty. And the other group ("Mods," THAT'S was what they were called) and they were quite fashionable, but in a youthful way.

The takeaway, though, was that Katherine peed her panties. That had to be mortifying to a young girl. Or a young boy. I'd have done the same thing if I was frightened enough.

A good 50 word-er!

Jay


 Comment Written 23-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I had fun writing this bit of my distant past. I certainly was scared. They were MUCH older than us, and totally ouside of my experience. Thanks for reviewing, Kate xx
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This A-less story, Peeing is Ignominious for Girls, covers the requirements and successfully tells a cute story without any As. Nice.


 Comment Written 23-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for reviewing, Kate xx
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That was quite the adventure. Teddy boys or not. Needless to say you made it through your composition without an "a." Nice job. ....................................


 Comment Written 22-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for this positive review, Kate xx
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Even without the letter A, you managed to write a story, from beginning to the end, with clear protagonists . Thank you for sharing this story with us.


 Comment Written 22-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for reviewing, Kate xx
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You wrote successfully about an embarr( )ssing incident without using the offending letter, so very well done. It's one of those things. If one is not permitted, one sees the need for it very much. Well done. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy


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reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for your positive review, Kate xx
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Build on this writing. You could have used more vivid descriptions of the disused mine building, Teddy Boys. What was the building like, (E.g., tumble-down, or crumbling.) And what about the boys made them threatening? (E.g., rough-looking, or thug-like.)
Keep at this sort of writing and work on description.


 Comment Written 21-May-2022



reply by the author on 21-May-2022
    Writing a full story in a dribble is an art on its own. There is no space in 50 words for what you are asking. I deliberately chose to write only, exactly this number (this was stated in the note) because merely eliminating a letter is not difficult enough. I develop the writing in non-blind contests, where it will have a wider audience. Here the development is let to the imagination of the reader.
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Your story is skilfully done on several counts - using vocabulary without the letter 'a', and limiting yourself to a 50-word count, while delivering a humorous story of fear and embarrassment, plus social history.


 Comment Written 21-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks so much for this great review, (one unsympathetic person criticised me for not having developed my 50-worder with enough description...) Kate xx
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Excellent. You did it! No "As" in sight. Great creativity. I enjoyed reading your story. When you have to go, you have to go. Good luck and you did a great job.


 Comment Written 21-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for reviewing, Kate xx
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First of all, you managed to tell a great story in just fifty words, which is great. Secondly, you told the entire story without using the letter "a." Also, I have no idea what a Teddy Boy is, but I still appreciated your story. Thanks for sharing!


 Comment Written 21-May-2022



reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Catching up now contest over. I certainly had fun writing this bit of my distant past. Thanks for reviewing (I filled in info about the Teddy Boys as soon as I read it), Kate xx
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