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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Write of Passage-Chapter I"

An Homage to Summer of '42

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Diny
 
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That was so funny! I so get it- I even found one in my Dads drawer once but I didn't tell anyone... Oh and The sears catalogue underwear section used to have me mesmorized for hours! haha
Write on David- hugs Diny


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2006
    Thank you, my friend.
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Black Wren
 
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Found a naughty poem book but it was the maganize that got you in trouble.
That must have been interestin gto discover life's adult mysteries in this poetry book.
Great job! I enjoyed reading this.


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2006
    Thank you, my friend.
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Hmmmm,
What a soul rendering admission you have here. I find it revealing as to how a teen/child might feel upon finding such smut... Sad part is, no one will really know the end affect it had to the child in the end. Only the child knows what he really felt and learned. Even if it was confusion and uncertainty. The fact he knew enough to hide it, told you that he thought it a sin or wrong. You wrote this well. Just don't know how else to review this one. Thank you for sharing this. Snitz :o)


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2006
    Thank you, Snitz.
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Donaya Haymond
 
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Ah, we delve still deeper into the nature of the one we call Marillion. I understand why a young boy would be curious about such things, though I am still upset at finding out one of my teenage male friends uses the internet for....such things. Sigh.


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2006
    Thank you very much, Raven. The "Net" is a very dangerous place, and much more damaging IMHO than a book.
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L K Pinaire
 
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I bet that was a squirmy moment. I think my dad was asked to explain to me about the beauty of love as opposed to sex. It didn't work, but I had on of the original Playboys. I wonder what that would be worth now. Nice poem. I enjoyed it very much and felt your pain.

Good writing,

Larry


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2006
    It was, Larry. That would be worth quite a bit. Thank you, my friend.
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Hi David,

:) I liked this clever piece of rhyming prose writing with its humorous tongue in cheek lines. Mum the unofficial porno cop is excellent. The lines indicate that the author is a child - a tricky thing for adults to achieve convincingly.

Very good and although I haven't read the book, I saw the film in my adolescence (best age to view it really) and loved the huckleberry finn type atmosphere and the wonderful Henry Mancini score.

Hetty


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2006
    That Mancini score still haunts me, Hetty. Thank you very much, and congrats on your seal. Very deserving. :)

reply by Hetty on 20-Sep-2006
    Thank you David. You're very kind.. H x
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Hi David,

An autobiographical sketch, and the perfect tone to go with it! I like it!
An extremely entertaining notion and the reading was fun itself.

Who can forget Summer of 42? Or Lady Chatterley? Or Peyton Place ( this was a hide-and-read one for me)?

The best was the playboy and seeing the purple doom! great imagery for me.

Will definitely want to read more of this.

Kay


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2006
    Thank you very much, m'lady. Hope all is well.
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Hi David,

Loved the image of you sneaking 'contraband' in a Superman top. :)
I never read Summer of '42, but I remember a few years ago(?), it made a comeback and was on Broadway for a short time and the book became popular again.

The first eye opener for me was the movie 'Fast Times at Ridgemont High'. I think I was around nine when that came out, maybe ten, and I caught most of it at my friend's house. Can I tell you how much trouble I got in for admitting to my Mom and Grandmother that I saw it???? To take a term right out of the eighties, I was so 'busted', it wasn't funny. :)

Loved this first part, David. The rhyme scheme was different, and it was fun to read it and try to get the rhythm of it.

Take care, and hey, it's great to see you up and posting!

Sissy


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2006
    Thank you, Sissy. You're part of the reason I bothered to post. I appreciate your note.

    Fast Times hit me as a young teen, too, so I'm with you there. Shockity-shock, baby.
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I had to chuckle at this. I will never forget when somewhere I was given a magazine called "True Stories>" Only it was my Dad who had the talk with me, how this was not suitable material for a young 10 year old girl to read.


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2006
    Thank you, my friend. I figure everybody has that taboo book in their past.
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I sure wish I had picked up 'Summer of 42' instead of 'Lady Chatterly' I think I would have understood a lot more. lol. Great write David, your usual wit, charm (in your poetry, lol) and superb craft from beginning to end. Another lesson well learned my friend and it is such a treat for me when you post. Thank you. easy


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2006



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2006
    Thank you very much, Easy. Sorry I haven't been around much lately. Great to hear from you, my friend.
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