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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "A Night In the Black Forest"

A collection of short tales of the supernatural

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Comment by
Asian Sapphire
 
 
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This was a good twist on the Little Red Ridinghood. It was excellently written with good descriptions. I could almost picture myself there. Also, I liked the ending too. I didn't expect it in the least.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Hmmm. Bet you thought she'd be dinner. Thanks for the review and the stars, Asian.
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Phyllis56
 
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Well, she ended up with the wolf anyway, just a bit different than the original fairytale story. It was an enjoyable read...the only thing I might change is the repetitive use of the word "odd" throughout the story. Thanks for sharing Phyllis


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    OK, Phyllis. I'll have a look at that.

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Ugh. There were a lot of "odd" things in there. Fixed 'em. Thanks for using your eagle eye for me.
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I really enjoyed this story. It is very well written. The descriptions are excellent, conjuring up vivid images. I like how it incorporates little pieces of different tales. Good job.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Thanks, Jeanne. It started out to be Hansel and Gretel, then Hansel spoke up and said he was a werewolf. Scarey when that happens. Anybody but another writer would think I was nuts.
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GREAT STORY! Like the creepy ending... great remake of the old tale... you added a new dimension of terror here! enjoyable read... good luck in the contest


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Thanks 1archangel, I may need it! It started out to be Hansel and Gretel, but then Hansel spoke up and told me he was a werewolf LOL. Anybody but another writer would think that's crazy.

reply by 1archangel on 04-Feb-2007
    not crazy... genious!
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IndianaIrish
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You've written a fun and clever contest entry, Norma. I liked all the little hints you gave throughout the story and the ending was perfect. Lots of good wishes for this in the contest. Indy :>)


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Having just read Nicko's entry grossed me out. One thing about it, this is very different. Thanks for the nice review, Indy. This started out to be Hansel and Gretel, and then LOL Hansel told me he was a werewolf!
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Very good, leading us into the 'Little Red Riding Hood' connection with the dripping red jacket, acute sense of smell and gleaming eye . Yep, if there had been pages, I'd a-been a-flippin'.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    So glad you caught the red jacket thing. I started to go with Hansel and Gretel, but Hansel turned into a werewolf on me. Always good to hear from you.
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Now see, if fairy tales had been written like this, I would've liked 'em a whole lot better. heh Cool entrant you have for the contest here. Read well and I was furiously rushing to the end. Didn't see anything out of the ordinary and I personally want to thank you for entering this contest and I wish you the best of luck with it!


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Thanks, Nick. I don't think you've reviewed me, or at least not recently. Glad you liked this one, and appreciate your wishes.
Comment by
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Brrrr.... giggles! You and your German lads, Norma! You made Hansel too attractive. I found myself thinking maybe Bette would have a pretty good (and very LONG) life! This story canters along beautifully, and leaves the reader (well, perverse readers like me) with a grin.

Did you know I've done werewolf stories too? Not at FS... but in the real world.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    So glad you liked it Sal. Did you catch the reference to his uncle being the bad wolf in that Black Forest legend of Freudenstadt? (or however the heck that town is spelled!)

reply by Sallyo on 04-Feb-2007
    I did indeed... that's what I meant by a looooong life for Bette!

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    So where are these werewolf stories of yours?

reply by Sallyo on 04-Feb-2007
    I'll PM you!
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A nice light read, reminiscent of the fairy tales of old. Though predictable, I believe this tale is constructed in just the manner for which it was intended. I loved the picture that accompanied the story, it set the tone for the piece quite well. The Brothers' Grimm would be proud.


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Thanks, Dovey. I had to start with the cliche because it's a contest, and the picture was provided by the person who designed the contest. Hard to write, because at first it was going to be Hansel and Gretel, but Hansel told me he was a werewolf! LOL
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Wow again! Here's what I like about your style...you move the action with a beautiful economy of words. Yet, the pictures you paint in my mind are complete and with rich detail. My favorite line:

The sky cracked, or so it seemed, as jagged twin forks danced across the heavens.

It's a great read, except that I chose it right before bed and now I have to turn out the lights. Thanks a lot for scaring me. You'll be hearing from my attorneys :) Seriously, very, very well done. Deano


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2007



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2007
    Thanks so much, Deano. Darn, I think I will become your fan, because I really like your writing, too. This started out as Hansel and Gretel, but then Hansel spoke up and said he was a werewolf (well, not literally). LOL Anybody but another author would think I'm crazy, hearing that.
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