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Dark Tales


Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Himself, The O'Brien"

A collection of short tales of the supernatural

  67 total reviews 
Comment by
hyway94
 
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If you don't win with this story, the one that does has to be a super one. I have read some other things you have written and I can say that this is right in line with the rest, maybe better. I'll wait for more.


 Comment Written 07-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 07-Apr-2007
    Hey, Hiway94, I won!!
Comment by
Green Machine
 
 
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What an amazing story. I have to say I love your sentence structure and the amount of detail and depth there is to your story. Also I really liked how well the accents sounded, it is difficult to get accents to sound how you want them to. A great Story.


 Comment Written 06-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 06-Apr-2007
    It's in the blood, Green. Half Irish. Thanks for the kind words, and I'm glad my accents worked.
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richie m
 
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AN ENJOYABLE LITTLE TALE--- DELIGHTFUL TOO --I MIGHT ADD!
ENOUGH TO MAKE A BODY YEARN FOR A TRIP TO THJE OLD SOD ITSELF!
WHERE ARE THESE FRIENDLY SPIRITS WHEN YOU NEED EM?
BUT I FOR GET MYSELF -- THE NOVEL WHAT OF THE NOVEL?----RICHIE


 Comment Written 04-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 04-Apr-2007
    Let's see, richie, the Novel is at chapter 67, I think. Did you miss anything? Next chapter is being written. If you did miss anything, go to my portfolio and catch up.

reply by richie m on 04-Apr-2007
    JUST A LITTLE HUMOR THERE!---RICHIE

reply by the author on 04-Apr-2007
    AHA! Humour is always appreciated.
Comment by
Focused True North
 
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I caught the banner ad on this and had to check it out. It has everything I love to read about...including swans. I'm such a romantic. Enjoyed the story thoroughly as well as the superb writing. Wish I had a six available for it.


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2007
    Thanks, Focused. I enjoyed the research and the writing. There really is a legend about a girl drowning herself in swan pond. I put the romance in for the contest.
Comment by
darkde
 
 
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great work, i like the picture and everything, so good expressed and written and also very exclusivei, thanks for adding it to fanstory well done


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2007
    Thank you for the review. Appreciated.
Comment by
RenieReader
 
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Norma: You certainly have a way with dialect which makes the dialogue excellent in your stories. I liked the introduction and build up in this piece, but the denouement almost seemed too abrupt. I'm not familiar with the contest requirements, was it limited on the amount of words? I liked the premise on which the story was based. I found no SPAGs or nits. Good luck.

Renie


 Comment Written 02-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 02-Apr-2007
    Actually, I thought I only had about 3500 words to play with, but turns out to be double that. 3500 was only the "recommended" maximum. I agree that parts moved too fast. Liked Padraic, though. Wouldn't mind if he popped in on me. LOL

reply by RenieReader on 02-Apr-2007
    Oh, I hear ya on dear Padraic (hope I spelled his name right). He might become the new universal heartthrob. Fabian has been around long enough. Who knows? ^_^
Comment by
Adora Bayles
 
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Nor, I would have given you a six if I'd had one to give. Your contest entry is by far the very best. You get my vote and I must tell you, I enjoyed the story thoroughly. I almost believe in ghosts!
Adora


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2007
    Been crossing my fingers for you, too. I think one other fellow would have been hard to beat, but he forgot he was in the contest until the last minute -- not enough publicity. Kind of exciting watching the votes.
Comment by
Angelwhite
 
 
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WoW! Very good, although it took me a minute to understand the accent of the irish actually written down in words. Being an american myself, i too would have expected the discription of a castle belonging to a "Lord" to be of armor and weapons, not warm and inviting like you did here.


 Comment Written 01-Apr-2007



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2007
    I have some DVDs of castles. Looked at them to see what the modern interior of an old castle would be like. So glad you liked it.
Comment by
2005 Short Story Writer Of The Year
IamSpook
 
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Hello Nor84

I really enjoyed this. It felt like a cross betweem Agatha Christie and Sir Conan Doyle. They way you created the scene was excellent. You made it seem as though it were on a stage. Very, very good writing.

Best Regards,
Mark


 Comment Written 31-Mar-2007



reply by the author on 31-Mar-2007
    Thanks, Mark. I really enjoyed the writing after I did enough research to get off the ground with it. Couple of other good ones posted in the last 36 hours have me a little nervous, so I promoted this yet one more time.
Comment by
GrandmaSharon
 
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This is quite a tale and should do well in the contest. I must say I did enjoy reading it very much. I found no typos or other writing errors.

Best wishes
Sharon


 Comment Written 31-Mar-2007



reply by the author on 31-Mar-2007
    Somebody else posted a very good entry last night. He forgot he'd entered the contest, so I'm hoping he doesn't get it promoted enough -- pretty darned good, except I think he put a moat around the castle -- which obviously didn't have one.
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