Okay, here I am. I started at the beginning to refresh my memory and have read every word. You have a smooth, easy-to-read style and I'm loving the story.
One suggestion: Because you introduce so many characters so quickly in the first few chapters, I found that I had to pull out a blank index card and make notes of who was married to who and who was sleeping with who and so forth.
Maybe its just me--but I wonder if you might include a cast of characters as part of the prologue?
Just a thought...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2008
This is the first time it's been mentioned, but I can see where that could be an issue. I've already run into that issue when I've read other books, too. I'll have to contact my agent and see if that's an acceptable option, Tracy. Sorry about the index card! LOL I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the story, though.
The accident was nicely done, M, and your ending keeps the reader wanting to turn that page! You really have me wondering what'll happen next...had he called Dana? Was it the Lexus that took him to the motel? Did someone else beat him to the Davis house? I have a feeling the next chapter isn't gonna tell me a thing, right? lol
Comment Written 26-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2007
I can't fool you, can I, Indy? Hahahaha All in good time! (I must have a cruel streak.)
Sometimes the editor has a mind of its own. What I usually do is post it in regular modd, then set preview, then when editing, go into advanced. This seems to work for me.
Okay, yes, the story is still moving forward. Great job
Comment Written 19-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2007
It sounds like I've got some "editor" issues I didn't catch. I'll go back and check it out, Book.
LOL! I often have the double-spacing problem myself, Marjorie. I don't see any nits or SPAG in this chapter, either. I enjoyed the cliff-hanger ending, and I'm assuming the next chapter will be from someone else's POV, to keep the reader wondering what happens next to Valerie Davis a bit longer.
I'm off to Chapter 8's L&K!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2007
Right you are, Heather! Gotta' keep everyone guessing.