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A collection of short tales of the supernatural

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Dear Nor84,

Dartmoor. The name does conjure up images of spectral hounds. Good call. I like the story and particularly the dialect, during dialog. It added great color.

Nickname


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    Hi, Nickname. Glad you liked it, and appreciate the review. Would have responded earlier, but had computer problems yesterday.
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Great story. Very well written. I like how you described Sir Francis's coach and hounds. Thank you for sharing this with us readers.


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    Hello, rite2. Thanks for a great review, which I appreciate.
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This is a wonderful Halloween Story or for any occasion , really. It
was well plotted and expertly written. It holds reader attention with no trouble.
Every sentence is needed. No excess words, Just perfect. No mistakes in language nor spelling. Excellent writing, Nor. I like it . Poor Sir Francis Drake.
And I thought that just a bit of history ! MG


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    Hello, Morning Glory. Great review. I was surprised to find this legend about Sir Francis while researching to write about spectral hounds. Thanks for the kind words.
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Janilou
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Jan Anderegg
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Fabulous story that gave me the chills reading it! Wow!



An hour later, with common sense replaced by liquid courage, we left the pub.

Brilliant line! How true!



I didn't notice any spag. Your writing is starting way down the page on my computer though! :-)

Jan


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    Hm...m Wonder why it's showing up like that. I'll take a look. Appreciate the review, Jan.
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A really good read. Your dialogue comes out in a very natural and believable way. I thought your story line flowed well and was easy to read. Hope you do well in the contest. cheers. bb


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    Thanks, blackbard. Appreciate the review and your kind words.
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A wonderful Halloween story. The atmosphere was spooky and the story was very believable. I liked the dialogue between the Irishman and the Yankee. A vivid imagination comes through in this story. A very good read.


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    Thanks, redqueen. Glad you liked it, and appreciate your review and kind words.
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interesting take on a classical topic, ur very good writer with good command of the engliish language. thankx for sharing this exceptional work


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    Thanks, General. Appreciate your review and your kind remarks. This was fun to write.
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Ahhh, and a lovely Halloween tale you've written, Nor84! This is an enchanting and delightful story -- chilling to boot. Very well done and a scary pleasure to read! Good luck with the contest!
Warmest regards,
CJ


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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    Hello, CJ. Thanks so much for liking this, and I appreciate the review.
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oooohhhhh! This was as spooky a read as they come. Wow, such imagination you have and what a wonderful job of bringing it to life. Spectral dogs and Hitler in the same story, you are a master!!


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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2007
    Thanks so much for liking it. A few people wanted it to be bloodier -- but I was just going for spooky. Appreciate your review and kind words.
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I really enjoyed this story.

Unholy light wandered across the moor, and I imagined legions of nameless dead buried deep in the bog. An unnatural silence cloaked the landscape, as if the world waited. [Nice descriptive passage]

Just a few sugestions I hope you will consider:

After another pint of Guinness, the little man excused himself, and I took the opportunity to talk to Rory. "Kind of an odd little fellow, isn't he?"

[is there another word other than litte that would describe him? Little twice in a row.]
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700-year -old
seven hundred year old
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The wind howled, or perhaps it was [-the howling of ]Drake's demon dogs.

It wasn't Halloweenish to me, but it was scary, especially the coach.

Best of luck in the contest.


:) Jackie


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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2007
    You're right, Jackie. I'm going in to repair.
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