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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Good News/Bad News"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

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Lady Waukesha
 
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Ray IS distracted--Amy is hot for his bod!

You are the goddess of dialogue.

I kneel before you, arms in the air in supplication,

chanting, I'm not worthy! I'm not worthy!


 Comment Written 28-Mar-2008



reply by the author on 28-Mar-2008
    Yes, you are! Yes you are! LOL It's fairly hard to raise the corners of my mouth in a smile before 6:00 in the morning, but you did it! You slay me, Tracy.

    Thanks ... and then some!

    Marjorie
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IndianaIrish
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Yup...he missed Amy's comment about Paul making a phone call while at the diner...I thought he'd jump on that one for sure!

Indy :>)


 Comment Written 21-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 21-Nov-2007
    He SHOULD have. I think Ray was just a wee bit distracted. LOL

    Thanks, Indy.
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I'm backkk! You don't seem to have lose anything in your writing. Are you about to set him up with Amy? Maybe I don't get it this time. As always it was great.


 Comment Written 09-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 09-Nov-2007
    Apparently, you're getting some vibes, John. He certainly was distracted, wasn't he? Hmmm. (Sorry to be such a tease, but I don't dare say one way or the other.)

    Thanks again, John!

    Marjorie
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I really enjoyed this chapter. It was nice to see Ray in another light....

I look forward to reading more of this book.

Thanks for sharing.

Sarah.


 Comment Written 07-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 07-Nov-2007
    Super!

    Thank you, Sarah.

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 07-Nov-2007
    You're welcome, look forward to reading more.

    Sarah.
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ransomme
 
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Okay what's going on, does Amy have a crush on Ray? I know just keep reading and all will be made clear! I can't help but wonder if Amy and Ray will get together.
Isn't she a little young for him?


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2007
    Exactly! Hehehehe

    Thanks, Ransomme. (Be patient. LOL)

    Marjorie
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Okay, you sucked me into the middle of this story! Now, I must go back to read the rest of it. Excellent dialogue, good structure, easy to follow and pleasure to read. ann


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2007
    Woohoo! Fantastic! Thanks, Ann.

    Marjorie
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Pit Bull Mom
 
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Hey Marjorie - another great chapter! I had only one note that stuck out with me.

"Super Glued" - are you sure that shouldbe capitalized?? The term super-glued has become a "common" and "everday" reference. Unless you're specifically referring to the brand of adhesive (which isn't so, since it's not a noun here), then I don't believe it should be capitalized. It's like the word Goggle vs. googled.

Anyway, other than than, I found this chapter well written and smooth.

Great job! Off to the next one.


Hugs,

Heather


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2007
    That's been fixed. LOL I took the easy way out and removed "super" from the picture altogether. It wasn't necessary. It's "outta' there"!

    Thanks, Heather.

    Marjorie
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I've only picked up the last few chapters. I am definitely needing to go back and read from the beginning, but from what I read I'm intrigued and am reallying enjoying. Well written.


 Comment Written 05-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    I'm really excited that you find the story interesting enough to go back and start at the beginning, CL! Thanks for that huge compliment as well as the fine review and excellent rating. I'm thrilled!

    Marjorie
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This was a very good chapter in a continuing story. I was able to follow, even though I haven't read all the previous chapters. The waitress character is realistic. You use dialogue very well here. I'm very curious as to what is going to be discovered, and what started the fight between Ray and Neil. Kept my interest all the way through.

I found no errors.


 Comment Written 05-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    It's great hearing you enjoyed this chapter, Sandollar. Thanks so much for your terrific review and excellent rating. I definitely appreciate your time and effort!

    Marjorie
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As you know, I reviewed this in lock and key. Therefore, I didn't review it again, other than to take a quick glance. It seems fine, and is well worth five stars.


 Comment Written 05-Nov-2007



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2007
    Thanks, Norma!
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