this is fun! Like I'm part of the investigation...
I like this line--good job of showing his aggravation: Woody took a second to massage his temples.
I'm hooked and addicted...
moving on...
Comment Written 29-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2008
A lot of the time, I can just see my characters doing these things. It's like a film running inside my head. Messy, but it gets the job done ... fairly often. LOL
Enjoyable as usual! I liked the following sentence, it made me smile!
The elder Speltz bobbed his head like it was on a loose spring. ?If we think of anything, I?ll be in touch in a damn big hurry, Chief.?
It would be nice to see the 'proper protocol' in this sentence, though. You may want to find out what dispatch usually says when giving their patrol cars information.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2007
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2007
Hi Catydid52,
I imagine I could put it in there. There just didn't seem a need for it, but I'll check it out.
Thanks very much for your review and the helpful suggestion!
I'm going to follow this and get a feel for it. Sometimes I drop off the face of the planet for a couple days, but I really feel this story building...... I like things like, "he froze." I like that because I now know he has feelings that I can deduce are key to the story. I like strong gazes and cool thrills racing up people's spines and upper lips sweating, especially involving crime stories.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2007
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2007
It would be great having you along on the "ride", Charlie11. I'm so glad you enjoyed it so much. There are a lot of strong gazes and cool thrills to come. LOL
The sad truth, we all know it looks like Nick, but he was to late, so, while they're out chasing Nick down, who really did it. Very nice, my friend.
hugs
book
Comment Written 13-Nov-2007
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2007
The investigation turns up some interesting stuff as Ray takes the lead in catching the culprit. That's coming soon.
Oh, my goodness ... everything's weaving like a picnic-covered basket here! Again, the dialogue moves this story along in a fast-paced, suspenseful way. Well done, Marjorie. I don't when I've enjoyed a 'book' more. I'm playing 'catch up' here after so many days away from FS.
Great stuff! Keep 'em coming.
Rae
Comment Written 12-Nov-2007
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2007
Yeah ... where've you been, Rae? Is everything all right? I'm so glad you're back.
This is a hearty blend of metaphor and simile, with strong dashes of prose. You have the makings of a delicious feast for the eyes here. Thanks for sharing. It was a pleasure to read and review.
You just keep doing it don't you? Ending those chapters a huge hook to keep your readers reading. i'm really into this story. I'm going to hate it when it ends. Excellent work
Comment Written 12-Nov-2007
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2007
If I can keep you entertained right through the end, I'll be ecstatic, Chloe. That's what it's all about. I'd consider that a real coup.
Oh, Marjorie, I've got a bad feeling about how this is going to go down for Nick. That's what he gets for thinking with the wrong head. (Oops, 'scuse me.) Is he going to be the patsy all the way around? I hope not. Great writing, my sleuthing pal.
My favorite:
The elder Speltz bobbed his head like it was on a loose spring.
Renie
Comment Written 11-Nov-2007
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2007
LOL tsk! tsk!
Nick's in for a rough time, but then, he's not the only one.