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'Dear' Crossing

Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Found and Lost"
An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN
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This is an action-packed chapter, Marjorie, and I love it. Nick's on the hot seat. That's going to be a tough one to wiggle out of. I think it's finally sunk in who fingered Nick on the phone. Poor sap. The tiger lady has turned on him. Great work, my friend.
I don't know, I just don't like this drawn out sixteen. How do you draw out the x sound? I think you can put some pregnant pauses in there to portray the same feel:
Sixxxteeeen ...." Ray drew a finger slowly across the file. "At sixteen you were in trouble for--"
[Let's see here. Ah, yes. Sixteen ... " Ray drew a finger slowly across the file. "It seems that at sixteen, you were in trouble for--"]
Renie
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2007 |
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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2007
I hadn't thought of it, Renie. Nope, you can't draw out an x! I don't know why, but I still kind of like it. Would it work for you if I were to draw it out as -- Sixteeeeeen..." Ray drew a finger... or do you just dislike that method completely?
Thanks for pointing out the obvious to the oblivious! LOL
Marjorie
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reply by RenieReader on 21-Nov-2007
That would work for me. I just kept thinking about trying to draw out the 'x' sound and going, "How on earth do you do that?" LOL.
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