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'Dear' Crossing


Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Tragedy"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

  23 total reviews 
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catydid52
 
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This story kept me riveted to each word. What was it that held Neil's attention instead of the road?

Referring to the dog's perspective of Neil - the man thing seems awkward.


 Comment Written 09-Jan-2008


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ddsaar
 
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I knew the dog was on the way back.
Nice chapter bringing a couple of things together, I couldnt spot any spag. well done
david


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2007
    Yippee!

    I couldn't leave poor Reggie out there alone, longing for his family. LOL

    Thank you, David!

    Marjorie
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hyway94
 
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I wonder what is in his pants. Now knowing how you sometimes write I would think that something not ever mentioned in the story is coming right out. Bad, Bad girl that's not nice to all those people who have it all figured out. You're doing so great changing the story every so often. I know you will say you're not changing it. Put you arrrrrrrre.


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 07-Dec-2007
    Hehehehehe! That's what keeps the mystery in the mystery, John. (I know! I'm a terrible tease.)

    Thanks much!

    Marjorie
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bookishfabler
 
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What the hell is going on under that man's pants? Now your mystery, crime story is turning a little Stephan King like. ANd just when the poor fellow got a date, huh, I mean a guest. LOL

It was an old country road (that) people seldom used (-it) except to cut across to a parallel highway.
Nice work
hugs
book


 Comment Written 07-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 07-Dec-2007
    Whoops! Thanks for the catch, Book. Done!

    Marjorie
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TomandOma
 
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Marjorie, I can't stand this! What was that itch, that turned into pain, that became a lump under Neil's trousers fabric that moved and hurt him excruciatingly? It must have been hard, indeed, to write one of your strongest characters out of the book. We were sorry to see the farmer die, but are grieving for Neil.
Will we ever learn what happened?

This is wonderfully well written, full of humor, as Neil tries to get a date; full of contrasting pain from a mysterious source.

I'm glad you have another chapter posted; this anxiety is too much!

Doris


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 06-Dec-2007
    Your reactions keep fueling my need to hurry posting each chapter. That's a GOOD thing. It's very encouraging and you have no idea how much I appreciate your support, Doris!

    Thank you!

    Marjorie
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Oh my God what the------

I have to read on and find out what is going on even though my head has an idea, my heart doesn't agree...lol....

Thanks for sharing, moving on now....

Sarah.


 Comment Written 06-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 06-Dec-2007
    There are still more surprises to come, Sarah. (I haven't lied about that yet, have I! LOL)

    Thanks, my friend!

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 07-Dec-2007
    I thought not...lol...look forward to it.

    Sarah.
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Sandollar
 
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Aw Marjorie D,
Say it ain't so. I was just beginning to like Neil. This was very good edge-of- your-seat action. The pace flows well as always. Who's finally going to solve this thing?

I found no errors.
Suggestion: That thing on his leg has supernatural powers and it saves him from the inevitable? Just a suggestion.
I'm really hooked on the story now. Great work.


 Comment Written 05-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2007
    A one-word answer: Ray.

    Supernatural powers, eh? You must have liked him better than you let on. LOL

    I'm happy you're enjoying it so much. That's the whole point Yay!

    Thanks very much, Sandollar!

    Marjorie

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a1940sFan
 
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I loved reading this chapter again. This exchange between Neil and Amy is just so cute:

?Amy, if I?m forced to ask Irene, could you live with that on your conscience??

Her smile grew still broader. ?You and your dispatcher might make a cute couple.?

He slapped his hand over his chest. ?Are you completely heartless??

I can just see Neil doing that.

I feel so sad that it doesn't look like he's going to get the chance with Amy that it looked like he was going to have. I know, I know -- it's just fiction. But gosh dern it!

And what the heck was moving beneath his trousers? And what happened to Reggie? And who killed Val?

See? Once again, you've left us with more questions than answers. You are a wicked, wicked woman, Marjorie!




 Comment Written 05-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2007
    The wickedest, Marcia! (Only in my writing, though. Honest.)

    It didn't make me happy to do that to Neil, but it helped advance the story. Dang!

    Many thanks, Marcia!

    Marjorie
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Pit Bull Mom
 
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Again, I sigh. I'm going to miss Niel. He was really turning into a good guy. Poor Amy. Guess she won't have to worry about going to that wedding, huh?

I like the rewording of the one line in the first paragraph. It feels more natural.

Other than those few comments, I saw nothing else, no nits or SPAG to comment on.

Hugs,

Heather


 Comment Written 05-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2007
    Wonderful! Thanks.

    Marjorie
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davidray
 
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Geez, Marjorie. I got into reading this and losttrack of finding any boo boos. I think it`s safe to say this is cleaned up quite well. I`m probably sort of like you: if I didn`t see it in the first place, chances are it`s not there!
Great description and cute dialogue in the diner.
Merry Christmas to you and yours, David


 Comment Written 05-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2007
    Thanks so much, David.

    Merry Christmas to you and your family as well.

    Marjorie
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