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Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Tragedy"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

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Kone Simons
 
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?Neil, I?[ELLIPSES INSTEAD OF DASHES
(?)]?

?I?ve gotta tell you, Amy, if you keep saying no to me, you?re going to singlehandedly ruin my five-year financial plan.[NEED QUOTE MARKS]

She stood back with her hands on her trim hips. ?What are you talking about??

?You don?t think I?ve been asking you out for so long because I?m crazy about you, do you?? He?d stopped for a drink of water, creating a dramatic pause. [NICELY DONE] ?It?s strictly a matter of finances.?

?How so??

?Think about it,? he told her [COMMA]. ?Everyday I come in here to ask you out over lunch, and everyday you turn me down, right??


?Well ... think how much I could save in tips if [EXTRA SPACE HERE] you were my girlfriend.?

Amy flung a damp towel at him from behind the counter.

?So how about it? Will you come with me to the wedding??

Her grin turned into a smile. ?I don?t think I could afford the loss of income.?

?Amy, if I?m forced to ask Irene, could you live with that on your conscience?? [REALLY LIKE THE DIALOGUE]

Her smile grew still broader. ?You and your dispatcher might make a cute couple.?

He slapped his hand over his chest. ?Are you completely heartless??

Amy laughed and extended her hand over the counter. ?As a guest?? [HUM?SCORE!]

GREAT ENDING TO THE CHAPTER?WHAT?S NEXT? CERTAINLY EVERY READER (INCLUDING ME) WANTS TO KNOW.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2007
    Thanks for your wonderful review and valuable help on this, Kone! It's definitely appreciated. I'll try to hurry the next chapter along.

    Marjorie

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clmccready
 
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Excellent job. What a twist. I can't believe it went in this direction. I never expected it. What will come next?? Like always, you always come with something so unexpected. Very well done. Again so enjoyable.

Colleen

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 Comment Written 04-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2007
    Yay! Thanks very much, Colleen.

    Marjorie
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Nanny 6
 
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This is the first chapter that I've read, but I'm going back to see what happened so far. And...I have to read the next chapter. Good cliff hanger here. Judy

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2007
    It's exciting to know you like it well enough to go back to the beginning, Judy. It's full of twists and turns. Thanks so very much!

    Marjorie
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