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Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Tirade"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

  25 total reviews 
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catydid52
 
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Great reading and I can't wait to read the next chapter. I'm catching up on my reading after finally having my computer up and running after 4 months.

Great job!


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2008
    Four months!!!!! Oh, my gosh! Mine was in the shop for only a week and a half and I felt like I was disconnected from the world! How did you survive it?

    Thanks, Catydid.

    Marjorie
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Criminy, woman, you're worried about a smaller payout? With writing like this, we should be paying you! See you at the end of the next chapter.

Hugs,

Maggie


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2008


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Hi Marjorie! Well, Paul sure went up a few spots in my book with that scene!! But I can't wait to see what nasty Dana has in store for her revenge.

Smiles,
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 20-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 21-Dec-2007
    You just know Paul never figured Dana could gain the uppper hand! Foolish, foolish man!

    Thank, Indy.

    Marjorie
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Pit Bull Mom
 
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Yikes, lol, he told her didn't he! I'm not real happy with Paul myself, but I'm darn glad to see him drop Dana like a hot potatoe. Certainly, he's right when he summarizes her character. lol. This was a good time to flip back to Paul and Dana and away from the actual investigation. I've been wondering when they were going to pop up again.

I hadn't realized how behind I was. My apologies. I've a bit of time today, so I'm trying to catch up.

Only one small note on this chapter:

She reacted almost physically to the verbal strike. (Maybe I just prefer "absolute" reactions whether than "almost". I say, let her react physically to the verbal strike without the "almost" because she probably would have jerked back as if struck, certainly her eyes would have widened (or narrowed in anger). All those things are physical reactions...)


Hugs,

Heather


 Comment Written 18-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
    Done!

    I'm still thinking about that legal brief. At least you and your ex-boss must get along for him to have asked and you to have agreed to do it. That's terrific! You're a good soul, Heather!

    Marjorie

reply by Pit Bull Mom on 18-Dec-2007
    One of the major reasons I left the office in May was because my boss was getting forgetful and I had been covering for him for a while. He was so dependent on me that his wife and I got together and figured out that if I "retired" ... so would he. So I did, because I was still real worried about his health and the possible of Alzhiemer's. We still had a lot of cases at the time, and several in appeal, so when I put in my three month notice I told him that I would continue to work for him from home until all the cases we had were closed, if he would agree to retire (he's also now partially deaf and has a degenerative eye disease ...). He agreed, and has since "fully retired" with the exception of the few Supreme Court cases that the two of us have been arguing together for years (cases that, if we win, will change federal law). I think he's much happier without all the stress, or at least finally learning how to relax. I saw him last Friday night (he got cutting horse championship tickets for my daughter and I) and he was doing well and preparing to head off to his (personal) island off the cost of New Hampshire for a few months.

    So, in short! Yes, we still get along real well.

    Hugs,

    Heather

reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
    That's absolutely fabulous, Heather. What a terrifically interesting and rewarding job that must be/have been! It's wonderful that you've helped him make that major change in his life.
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THe dollars don't matter unless it's something not worth reading, and then I'll pass on it, even with dollors waved in front of me. I only read what I really enjoy. Don't have time for anything else. So, I will be there, holding your hand, sitting on the edge of my seat, until you finish this book.
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book


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 16-Dec-2007
    You dear, dear woman!

    Book, thank you!

    Marjorie
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Hi again, here sooner than I expected..lol...

Look forward to reading more of this book and can't wait to see where it all leads.

Sarah.


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 16-Dec-2007
    I try to keep the chapters coming quickly. I soooo wish I could post daily instead of every two or three days!

    Sarah, thanks!

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 16-Dec-2007
    It works well for me to read them a few at a time, as I only come in and have time these days to read a few at a time.

    Thanks for sharing,

    Sarah.
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Well welcome to the club, I glad to see that I'm not the only one to make mistakes. Why do these men who have someone on the side always make it so the woman has something to say to someone. Now if he had waited till he got the big job he wants then he could tell her to go to hell. Nice really nice chapter.


 Comment Written 15-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 16-Dec-2007
    You're so right!

    Thanks very much, John. Good night.

    Marjorie
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Nice job, Marjorie. Dialogue moved this section smoothly and I'm glad to read that Dana isn't taking it on her back.I've got nothing else to say .... 1 point payout has that effect! Tee hee hee..... oh, come on ... laugh. :)
Merry Christmas.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 15-Dec-2007
    Yeah ... clicking on the wrong certificate was really aggravating! I'll make sure not to do that again.

    David, thanks so much. I'm glad you liked Dana's evil tactics.

    Marjorie
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The characters are well described. Dana is having a pay for her attitudes. Paul is taking thinks he has used her. The chapter was enjoyable.

Great novel.


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2007
    Dana is not going to take this lying down. You'll see what I mean in the next chapter. I sure do appreciate your following the story, Angela.

    Thanks so much!

    Marjorie

reply by angela oiticica on 14-Dec-2007
    Thanks.
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Buctar
 
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Marjorie:

And the story goes on. Great tension. I liked the read.

I have a few nits for you to look at.

but even she could see the tension in her face.( )She counted the strokes as she brushed (Need a space between sentences)

without releasing her.( )?Who else would it have been? (Needs a space between sentences.)

A( ) sneer crossed his face. (Remove the extra space after A)

Damn you to hell, you sonofabitch! (I think son-of-a-bitch might be hyphenated.)

I enjoyed the read.

Bill


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 14-Dec-2007
    Thanks for your review and also for your help, Bill! I appreciate both ... and you, too!

    Marjorie
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