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Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Determination"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

  28 total reviews 
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catydid52
 
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Well at least Woody is willing to have the coroner take a closer look at the lump on Sumner's neck.

The story is heating up nicely...


 Comment Written 13-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2008
    It's going to get hotter still ... and that's a promise.

    Thanks, Catydid!

    Marjorie
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Minataur
 
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I'm so envious of your way with dialogue. It makes the reader feel as though the people are in the room and we're eavesdropping.

Hugs,

Maggie


 Comment Written 08-Jan-2008


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sarahhitch
 
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Hi there Majorie, this was another well written chapter and a pleasure to read and review. I am looking forward to reading more of this to see where this is going.

SaRAH.


 Comment Written 30-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 01-Jan-2008
    Thanks, Sarah!

    Marjorie
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Hi Marjorie. I really enjoyed ther pace of this section.The dialogue is bang on and Ilike how you leave enough out to allow the reader to use their imagination. Good move. I hear that from my tutor all the time.
A couple small things:
-Woody threw his arms in the air. His hands came to rest over the back of his head. ?I don?t believe this. That?s asinine. What kind of idiocy is this?? (I've read this a few times and played out the actions to myself. Everythime I throw up my hands, I feel like saying, "I don't believe this!! then the rest ..." and then I bring my hands down. Play it out. Try it for yourself. Not that it makes a huge difference. I thinkit's just a tad more realistic.)


-Ray left the office pleased, frightened, anxious. (and anxious.)
Well done! I will catch up on the rest. Thanks for your continued support.
David :)


 Comment Written 24-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 24-Dec-2007
    Alrighty! I played it out for myself, David, and you're right. The positioning of the dialogue has been edited to reflect that change. Thanks sincerely for being so keyed into the fine details. I appreciate that loads! The and has been added as well.

    Hugs to you and a wish for a wonderful Christmas!

    Marjorie
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Pit Bull Mom
 
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I know her prints were found on the ax, and evidence points to her cutting off her own arm with the ax, but I'm still not convinced she cut off her own arm. An ax is awfully heavy and even out of your mind with "itchies" and some crazed virus inside of you (just guessing here - like Outbreak! lol) getting the right angle on the ax would have been hard. Either way, something truly out of the ordinary is definitely happening in that small town.

No nits or SPAG to comment on.

Hugs,

Heather


 Comment Written 23-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 23-Dec-2007
    Time will tell as Ray continues his investigation!

    Heather, thanks as always!

    Marjorie
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I love the argument. It holds the chapter together in its (fictional) reality. It drew me into the story and urged me on.
Great stuff.
Well done.

Lil. ;-)


 Comment Written 23-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 23-Dec-2007
    I worry when I have to repeat information. It's necessary now and then, but it concerns me that it might get boring. I'm glad you didn't feel that way about this chapter. Thanks so much, Lil!

    Marjorie
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Honestly, you can understand why Woody doesn't go along with Rays thinking. At least for right now--. However, I think very soon that Ray will fine something to sway Woody over. Yep, that's my thoughts. You are doing a great job on not allowing things that have been said prior to be boring. Great chapter as usual. Mary


 Comment Written 22-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 22-Dec-2007
    Phew! I can't tell you how glad I am to hear you say that ... about not being boring when I repeat some things. You have no idea how I worry about that. And yet, sometimes repetition is needed when they're re-hashing what they know, etc. I do try to minimize it, but I still worry about that aspect.

    You've made me feel a lot better, Mary. Thanks!

    Marjorie
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a1940sFan
 
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I know Ray is going to take some satisfaction in being right and showing Woody up for his bullheadedness. :)

I'm really looking forward to finding out what caused all of these people and animals to go nutty.

However, I know you and sure as shootin' you've got more curve balls to toss at us! ha

Another great chapter for the book and, of course, you've left us salivating for more! Good job!


 Comment Written 22-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 22-Dec-2007
    I've just now put the next chapter in Lock and Key. It would probably be smart of me to wait until after Christmas to release it. Dang!

    Thanks very much, Marcia! I hope you and your family have a wonderful, blessed Christmas.

    Hugs!

    Marjorie
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medisec
 
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Well, you deserve another 6* rating on this one, Marjorie. A double-whammy. You've really got me curious and I'm sure the rest of your audience is just as intrigued by your plot(s). Great chapter. I can't wait to find out what Ray thinks it is because I can't fathom what it is at all. Well done.

Rae


 Comment Written 22-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 22-Dec-2007
    Rae, thank you! Here it is 1:05 a.m. and I get this fantastic review! Now how am I supposed to get to sleep? Smiling ... that's how. LOL

    Hugs to you.

    Marjorie
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Marjorie:

Another great chapter. I really enjoyed reading it. I think I might have missed a couple of segments. I will try to go back and pick them up.

I found only one nit to pick.

?I?m guessing that?s a ?no?.? (The period belongs inside both quotation marks. I looked it up my style manual last week when one of the authors came to me looking for an answer he couldn't find.)

I hope you nave a merry Christmas.

Buctar


 Comment Written 21-Dec-2007



reply by the author on 22-Dec-2007
    I'm so glad to have you following the story and helping "sweep up" after me. I'm very grateful for your help, Bill.

    Thanks, and have a wonderful, happy Christmas!

    Marjorie
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