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Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Last Ditch Effort"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

  21 total reviews 
Comment by
catydid52
 
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Captivating story as always. Sorry to hear about your computer, but glad that it is up and running again.

Your story flows well, as the suspense grows!


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
    Boy, did I ever miss having my computer, Catydid. It was like losing my right arm. I felt so out of touch it was incredible. It was like Christmas all over again when I got it out of the repair shop!

    Thank you, Catydid!

    Marjorie

reply by catydid52 on 29-Jan-2008
    Your welcome and I can certainly agree with that sentiment...the same as if you once had a car, and you have none now...you don't know how good you had it.
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Woody is getting on my last nerve. Is he blind? Of course, it has something to do with those weird cysts. If he doesn't help Ray soon, I'm gonna start writing him poison pen notes!

Well done.

Hugs, Maggie


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2008
    Soon, Woody won't have any choice! LOL He's right to insist on proper police procedure, but foolish not to open his eyes and be willing to trust instincts to some degree. Live and learn, right?

    Thanks, Maggie!

    Marjorie
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bookishfabler
 
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Apparently, the holidays have set us all behind. I just now got to this, so, I'm way behind as well, but when I open my mail, I hope for another chapter. It was fun the back and forth, great job.
hugs
book


 Comment Written 20-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2008
    My computer lost its hard drive right after Christmas. Very bad timing! I'm just glad to have it back.

    XO

    Marjorie
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Honus X Heppablatte
 
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This is like a dusty road from Ottawa to Patterson along the wreck of the Weaverville stage. It is punctuated with vivid views of what is and what could be. It encompasses the joyous outset of a journey yet never releases the definite possibility of danger and despair. I loved it.


 Comment Written 19-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 19-Jan-2008
    Thanks very much, Honus!

    Marjorie
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IndianaIrish
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I'm so delighted to be reading your novel again, M! It seems like forever. But everything fell into place again reading this chapter...a well-written and intense chapter at that. I love the tension between the boys...it sure builds the excitement of the investigation.

Smiles,
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2008
    It seemed like forever to me too, Indy. My computer hard drive crashed. It was in the shop for awhile. I'm sooooo glad to have it back.

    Thanks for your great review. I'm glad it wasn't so long you forgot!

    XO

    Marjorie
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Yay! Your computer is up and running again. I'm so glad to hear from you, my dear Marjorie. This was another fabulous--but frustrating--chapter. We know Ray is right, but Woody is being obstinate and using too much common sense. (Does that make sense?)

"The(Omit==>y) way they explained it to me, cysts are hollow,

Cyber Hugs,
Renie


 Comment Written 17-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 17-Jan-2008
    I feel like my right arm has been re-attached! I felt so horribly out-of-touch with my computer in the shop.

    I understand what you mean about too much common sense. Sometimes you just have to go with your gut instinct. Woody's not willing to accept that yet.

    They is now just a lowly "the" ... as it should be. Thanks for that and, of course, for sticking with me through this story. I couldn't have asked for better company on this journey. I mean that!

    XO

    Marjorie

reply by RenieReader on 17-Jan-2008
    I'm just so glad you finally got your computer back from the shop.
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angela oiticica
 
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Last Ditch Effort talks about the coincidence the victims had: a cyst. Will that be the key to the answer or something else is the motivation? I beleive the second preposition is the answer...

Great return Marjorie. How good you're returning to your writing. I find important your literary contribution.

Hare Krishna


 Comment Written 16-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 16-Jan-2008
    It was awfully hard being without my computer. It 'died' an untimely death. The hard drive crashed. It's a relief having it back again.

    Thanks so much, Angela!

    Marjorie

reply by angela oiticica on 18-Jan-2008
    Your hard driver crashed? You lost everything with it. I hope your writing pieces were saved.


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2008
    Hi Angela,

    Luckily they were able to save all my files. I did have them saved in one form or another, but I'm glad that wasn't a problem anyway.

    It's nice to be back on-line!

    Marjorie

reply by angela oiticica on 20-Jan-2008
    Hello..welcome...
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An absolute joy to have you up and running again. I'm sure it will be only a matter of time ebfore we find you at the top of the heap again!!
Wonderful exchange in dialogue.One certainly can FEEL the testosterone build up in that office. Great job!

A few small things for your consideration, please:

-?According to them, cysts don?t ordinarily cause itching or pain either.? (It might just be n=me, Marjorie, but I;m thinking you established earlier that cysts aren't itchy or painful. So, it stil is okay that you had it mentioned in this dialogue, but I'm not sure about the 'either' at the end.)

-?Ray, who would know better, you or them? (..know better: you or them?)

-?I asked Dr. Bradley some questions about your dog. (again, this might just be me, but after Woody closing the office door so Irene couldn't hear, I wasn't too sure who was doing the talking here. And the next paragraph starts out with Ray, which made me scratch my head even more. Maybe if you had just one reference in here ... who knows, it might be just me.)

-You missed April Fool?s Day by more than a month, Ray.?
(love it, Marjorie!)

-Ray was angry--angry because Woody was right in his own way--angry because he couldn?t prove he was right as well (I really can't see you placing 3 'was' in one sentence. At least, not intentionally. So, for this very reason, I'm bringing it to your attention, sweety. I know what you're trying to say ... but show me instead. Too much telling here, girlfriend, and I know I don't need to go any further than that!)

-?Like hell I will.? (With Woody storming behind the desk afterward, this sentence, I think, is begging for an excamation mark. What do you think?)

Welcome back. Hopefully, I'll be able to add something to your editing team.
All my best, David


 Comment Written 16-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 16-Jan-2008
    It's definitely great being back. Darned computer! I've decided to forgive it, though, as long as it behaves itself.

    As always, thanks for your review and suggestions, David. I sure do appreciate them.

    Marjorie
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Awe gee...thanks for yet a n o t h e r cliff hanger. I'm on pins and needles here. I was just as excited as Ray was about calling the lab about what was inside the ooze of the cyst. Good call. But I was equally disappointed that Woody wouldn't go for it. Whew! Good chapter! Judy


 Comment Written 16-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 16-Jan-2008
    What's awful is that they're both right! Like they say: it's always darkest before the dawn, and pretty soon Ray's going to find that out for himself. (I'm a terrible tease. Sorry about that!)

    Thanks, Judy.

    Marjorie
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Hey there Marjorie I have missed my reading of this and glad to see you are back and ready to be read. I have been looking forward to reading more.

I have to say I have so many thoughts going through my head about this and then you add more things to make me think a few other things. I liked this and can't wait to see what you will come up with next.

Chat soon.

Sarah.


 Comment Written 16-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 16-Jan-2008
    I can tell you this much, Sarah, Ray's in for a lot more trouble before he gets to the bottom of this. You'll see what I mean in the chapter after next.

    Thanks much!

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 17-Jan-2008
    I see, well I look forward to the next chapter and the one after, thanks for sharing this as I am enjoying reading this story more than I thought I would, it has me guessing and discovering when I think I am right, I'm wrong, then I am thinking something else and it heads almost back to what I thought it might be, this is great writing.

    Sarah.
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