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Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Trapped"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

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Pit Bull Mom
 
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Okay, this one was good and a good time to go back to those two, but my mind is on other things! I still haven't a clue about where, exactly, this is all leading and I'm usually really good at figuring these things out quickly .... hmmmm.

Off to the next one.

Heather


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2008
    It's after 11:00 and I have to be up at 5:30, so please forgive me if I don't give a longer response to your great reviews, Heather. I'm sooo anxious to see what you think of each chapter, but don't have the time to reply at length tonight.

    Thanks--for the review and being understanding.

    Marjorie
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Your character building skills are fabulous! The ones who are supposed to be hated don't disappoint, nor do those grabbing pity, sorrow, love or all the other myriad of emotions you pull into your stories. Excellent writing!

Hugs,

Maggie


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2008
    Sometimes these characters just took over for me. You've probably heard people say that before, and I can honestly say it's true. It's fantastic when it happens. Once in a while, they even REFUSE to do as you planned and force you to something entirely different.

    What a tremendous compliment you've paid me! Thanks a million, Maggie.

    Marjorie
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IndianaIrish
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Chapter 50 is very well written, M. You make the reader really dislike both those characters and you do it with your skillful use of description and dialogue. Gosh, they are both such stinkers! LOL

Indy :>)


 Comment Written 03-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 03-Feb-2008
    They deserve each other, don't they? LOL

    Indy, thanks as always!

    Marjorie
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You have done a great job in describing and embellishing on the character of Dana.

What a nasty piece of work she is!
Great job as always!


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 29-Jan-2008
    Creating Dana's character, I was a little shocked at how easily it came to me. Maybe I have a really dark side that never sees the light of day. I'm keeping it that way, too. LOL

    Thanks, Catydid!

    Marjorie
Comment by
Honus X Heppablatte
 
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I must say that it is work like this one that really makes me enjoy reviewing the words here. You exemplify raw unbridled talent and it is the kind of stuff you cannot learn in schools, Great job.


 Comment Written 26-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 28-Jan-2008
    Honus, thank you so much as always. Your support and encouragement mean a lot to me.

    Marjorie
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Buctar
 
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Marjorie:

The story becomes more complicated. Looks like Dana might be sowing the seeds of her destruction?

Only one minor comment:

If you need your ?wife? to help you (I think "wife" should be in italics.)

Loved it.

Bill


 Comment Written 24-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
    What a great way to end my evening, Bill! Thanks for those six stars. You've really put a smile on my face.

    Italics it is!

    Thanks again.

    Marjorie
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Hi, great read as usual, not as much meat as in other chapters, but guess this is one of those you had to split in half, I really do not that woman and whatever is going on in that place, boils or not. I wish she would get one.

Well I'm waiting for the next chapter.

Sarah.


 Comment Written 24-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
    LOL It would serve her right!

    Thanks, Sarah.

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 25-Jan-2008
    It would too, and I noticed I missed out the word like, whoops.

    Waiting for the next chapter. To see if she gets a boil.....lol....

    Sarah.
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Hi, Marjorie. I'm a little later with this review than promised, but you know why I wasn't 'in the mood' yesterday! LOL.

My, my, this is such a great story of greed and Paul is right up there with Dana. You reap what you sow. She's a very controlling/manipulative witch with a capital B. But this all makes for a great story. I love it. I only have a suggestion at the end:

I don't think you need "behind himself" (it's a given), so just say: He slammed the door and fought the urge ...(wonder if you need past tense as in 'slammed'). Your call.

Keep up the great work!

Hugs, Rae


 Comment Written 24-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
    Done! "Behind himself" is history. LOL

    Yes, I understand completely. I'm so excited for you!

    Marjorie
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This couple reminds me of Bill and Hillary lol. On a more serious side. You've done your job at making the reader angry and hate Dana. If Paul does her in, it would not hurt my feelings. Right now I feel sorry for him, but need to remember that he's not a very nice person, either. Judy


 Comment Written 24-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
    Exactly. LOL It's hard to feel sorry for either one, but if I had to choose, I'd root for Paul. Dana takes pride in her scheming.

    Thanks so much, Judy!

    Marjorie
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bookishfabler
 
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These chapters are like M&M's, you need another and right away. LOL. Very well done and can't find any fault. If this were in abook store, I would snatch it up. Even though I'm reading it, let me know if it is ever for sale. We have to support our fellow writers.
hugs
book


 Comment Written 24-Jan-2008



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2008
    If it ever gets published, I'll be shouting it from the rooftops. LOL As a lover of M&M's, I'm thrilled by the comparison! Yahoo!

    Hugs back.

    Marjorie
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