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Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Interrogation"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

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Comment by
Pit Bull Mom
 
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This chapter came across as very real, Marjorie. The tension, the accusations - I was glad to see that Woody is just a bit weary of the AID as the enter - that's the way a cop realy feels about them - always looking for the bad in cops and convicting them.

No comments to make on this one. On to the next.


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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2008
    Yay!
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Intriguing as always. The plot continues to thicken with suspense, as the next chapter swings back to Dana, Nick, and Paul...

Good job,
Catharine


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2008
    When I wrote this novel, my toughest challenge was choosing the right place to situate each chapter. Each one had to be placed in a way that it kept the interest alive in each aspect of the story.

    Catharine, thank you very much!

    Marjorie

reply by catydid52 on 18-Feb-2008
    Your welcome!
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Hi Marjorie,

WOW! A terrific write. As I read this chapter, I could feel the tension building - in a very real way.

Again, not a single word to suggest improving upon.

You are really an amazingly gifted wordcrafter, my friend! :) (Yes, I know "wordcrafter" isn't a word; Muse sticks tongue out at dictionary, refusing to hyphenate the word. HA HA HA.)

One interesting irony you point up:

"The standards of conduct expected of police officers are so high that they fall under greater scrutiny than the general population."

Wouldn't it be nice ***IF*** this were true? (Not a personal issue for me, but I could tell you absolute horror stories of domestic violence - even 1 officer who shot up the house - I saw 29 bullet holes (no intruder, just angry with wife) and NOTHING was done to him. Statistically, VERY typical.) While we're holding police accountable for their actions (what a concept - lol), how's about liars - ahem - er - lawyers and politicians to boot?

Now that we've resolved all the problems patriarchy has created, we can dust off our hands while the planet heaves a sigh of relief, and get on with the next chapter. lol...

Thanks for sharing!

WRITE ON,

Jan


 Comment Written 12-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2008
    Ditto! (I'm a woman of few words ... just for the moment, Jan.)

    Thanks for your great review. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the chapter so much!

    Marjorie
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Marjorie this was another fab read, I am looking forward to seeing where this is all going and how it will pan out.

What else can I say but I look forward to more.

Sarah.


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 06-Feb-2008
    As far as I'm concerned, Sarah, that's plenty!

    Again, thanks! I'm so glad to have you along for the ride.

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 07-Feb-2008
    Thanks, I am really enjoying reading and know I am no good at catching any nits, well there are never any when I read it anyway.

    I can't wait to see what you have in store for us.

    Sarah.
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Getting close to the end? Why? Can't this go on for another fifty or so chapters? You have a wonderful knack for adding the little touches that make it seem so real, such as the man removing imaginary lint from his sleeve, etc. Extremely well done.

Hugs,

Maggie


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 05-Feb-2008
    You keep putting smiles on my face, Maggie. They just keep getting bigger and bigger. Pretty soon my cheeks will start to ache! LOL

    THANK YOU!

    Marjorie
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Excellent, Marjory! You have created two internal affairs guys that we can hate with gusto. For a moment - a misguided moment - I had some hopes for the older man, but I suppose internal affairs has to be conducted by skeptical persons, so nice job with your depiction of the hated IA men.

I have only one measly suggestion for tightening the opening paragraph:

The next day, Woody sat at his desk trying to concentrate on the routine paperwork

I think 'The next day' is not a good opening phrase, because the reader wants to be in the present. I think you can jump right in with 'Woody sat at his desk,' because you immediately explain that he slept poorly, which indicates the lapse of time.
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I'm still rating this a five for the excellent character presentation and suspense, and the still unsolved puzzle of the hammer and what the victim was doing in that basement. Hope it was something nefarious.

Excellent! I'll see you next chapter.

Doris

Oh, forgot to mention in the last chapter: From the first, I had a feeling that Ray and his wife would eventually get straightened out; that was hinted at by Ray's stubborn faithfulness to his wife.

Excellent writing, Marjory


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2008
    Your suggestion is right on the money, Doris. I'll fix that right away.

    Ray and Gail's relationship isn't resolved until the end of the sequel to this novel. It weaves its way through Ray's next investigation, but plays a large part in that completed follow-up novel.

    Thanks so much, Doris!

    Marjorie
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Yeah! I'm always delighted to find a nother chapter in my message box. Every weekend I run behind and struggle to catch up with all the wonderful stories and chapters. Your's is one that I always know where I am. You do a great job with action. I can see every little move the characters make. Maiking this a top book. Great job.
hugs
book


 Comment Written 04-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 04-Feb-2008
    It's awesome, hearing it's memorable. Of course, I'm trying to post the chapters only a few days apart. It helps the reader keep the details in mind.

    You sure do make me feel great, Book! Thank you!

    Marjorie
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Hi, Marjorie.
I really enjoyed this chapter. Plenty of 'heat' and a great pace to it. As usual, your dialogue is natural and realistic.
I've missed a few chapters, but this one holds strong on its own.
Great read. I love the emotion you give through your writing.
I found nothing that needs changing.

Lil. ;-)


 Comment Written 03-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 03-Feb-2008
    I know you don't normally read novels, Lil. (I think you mentioned that in one of your forum posts.) That's all the more reason I truly appreciate that you took the time to read this chapter. Thanks very much for your terrific review. You've made my morning!

    Marjorie

reply by LillySmith on 03-Feb-2008
    I love to read novels, I just find it hard to read them all the way through. I tend to lose track of them, or just can't find the time. If I had a time machine, I could just pause myself in there, and keep up to date with everything, but then, I would probably forget to get out! LOL!

    Lil. ;-)

reply by the author on 03-Feb-2008
    LOL I think you've got the makings of a story there, Lil!
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It sure would be difficult to remain calm and level-headed if confronted by those two goons. Been wondering about Nick--glad to see we'll get some word about him in the next chapter. Such a great job with this book, M. You should be so proud!

Smiles,
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 03-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 03-Feb-2008
    Ray isn't exactly the laid-back type either. LOL

    You sent "smiles" and it worked. I'm definitely smiling. You're awfully kind, Indy! Thank you.

    Marjorie
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Marjorie,

This is an excellent chapter, one of your better efforts. I guess IAD types have been unpopular ever since Joseph Wambaugh wrote about them.

Dave M


 Comment Written 02-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 02-Feb-2008
    I enjoyed the making the more intimidating of the two the nicer one. Another of my F.S. friends called the smaller one a victim of the "Short Man Syndrome." I think she's onto something!

    Thanks, Dave. I'm glad you liked it so well.

    Marjorie
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