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Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "The Best Laid Plans"

An investigation into a grisly death in Widmer, MN

  21 total reviews 
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catydid52
 
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Wow! It seems payback is right around the corner for Paul Davis. He is not getting away with his merciless attitude to how he let Dana die.

Can't wait to see where Ray is going to take this.

Great job with the suspense as usual.

Catharine


 Comment Written 18-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2008
    Aha! I'll bet Catydid is a nickname your family gave you. I like that!

    Paul certainly deserves payback! I'm glad you liked this.

    Thanks.

    Marjorie

reply by catydid52 on 19-Feb-2008
    No my family didn't give me the name catydid, although my father used to call me cat. (said I used to whine like a cat..lol)

    I chose a name after my main email account had been hacked.

reply by the author on 19-Feb-2008
    Either way, I like your choice, Catydid!
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Pit Bull Mom
 
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Wow. Paul is certainly having a complete and unexpected change in his life these past weeks, isn't he?

I believe this was a strong chapter - and very necessary. Were I on the board, I would have made the same decision they did, so to me it felt very real as did the rationalizations you offered.

Off to the next one.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 18-Feb-2008
    We're on a roll! Yahoo!
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IndianaIrish
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It was great reading about Paul's downward spiral...can't wait to see what he does next. Your dialogue is fantastic as always and what keeps the oomph in your book.

Smiles,
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2008
    Only a few more chapters, Indy! Thanks kindly.

    Marjorie
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Minataur
 
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Help you? I wouldn't know where to begin! Looks to me like you are swinging right along on your own. Now get the next chapter out here. I'm waiting already.

Hugs,

Maggie


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2008
    Oh, believe me, Maggie, I'm trying! LOL

    Thanks so much.

    Marjorie
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Hi Marjorie,

Well Paul gets his come-uppance. it is nothing more than he deserves.
The story flows well and it is easy to imagine the anger rising in Paul as he is told you are second best pal. The dialogue is very good.
Paul might regret his outburst in telling htme to keep the VP...or is there something else in store for the man I wonder?
I will be sorry to see this fascinating book come to an end.

david


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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2008
    I can't answer your questions, of course, David; it would spoil it for you. But, you'll find out soon enough. Your final comment is even more welcome than you know. There are times I wonder if I've created too many complications and drawn the book out longer than readers would like. Thanks very much for helping to put my mind at ease.

    Marjorie
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So only a few to go now and boy is it getting good. I am really enjoying reading and reviewing .

I look forward to seeing how this all ends.

Great job on this chapter, Sarah.


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2008
    It won't be long now, Sarah!

    Thanks!

    Marjorie

reply by sarahhitch on 14-Feb-2008
    You're welcome.

    Sarah.
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LillySmith
 
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This chapter was exciting and flowed with great ease.
Ha! Paul sure didn't see that coming. All that murder and manipulation for nothing!
I would assume that "King" out of "king of the hill" should be a capital, but was not sure; just thought I'd say it to bring it to your attention.
Great chapter, can't wait to read the next!

Lil. ;-)


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2008
    Paul definitely got blindsided by that one ... and deserved it royally!

    Thanks so much for your great review and feedback, Lil. You're terrific!

    Marjorie
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medisec
 
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Pretty well flawless account of Paul's downfall--I figured something like this would happen. Let's see now, we have numerous dead bodies, not to mention animals, one cleared of murder, one still on the look-out for the cause of the 'itch' and its direct link to some of the deaths in this wonderful story. Wow, you really know how to pack a punch in a nail-biter. I'm really looking forward to your finishing touches--a few more chapters?

Well done, Marjorie.

Hugs, Rae


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2008
    Yes, just a few chapters and, I think, a short epilogue. I've got some revising I want to do before posting even to Lock and Key. There was no epilogue in my novel, but I'm going to do some chopping and rearranging to create one now. I think I "missed the boat" the first time around. LOL

    I LOVE your summary of the story, Rae! Thanks.

    Marjorie
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Hi Marjorie,
Sorry for not being able to keep up with this. A lot of family problems.
About this: I'm going out of order here, but i'll figure it all out. Marjoprie, this is well-written. The dialogue is second to none and the storyline flows like a dream. Very realistic. Maybe I've grown rusty since I've reviewed last, but I cann't find any flaw.
Excellent.
Hugs, David


 Comment Written 13-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2008
    No flaws? Wow, you MUST be rusty. LOL I hope your problems are solved or will be shortly, David. I understand completely. Take it easy.

    Thanks as always!

    Marjorie
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Buctar
 
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Marjorie:

All this for naught. Poor Paul. Another good chapter. I have a couple of observations--mostly extra spaces.

?You?re good, you son of a bitch, and from within the company (I think son-of-a-bitch is hyphenated.)

?John? John! I don?t--( )I can?t be hearing you right.? (Remove the space.)

he?ll do an excellent job as president.( )? (Remove the space.)

As for the stockholders( ).... (When ending a sentence with ellipses, there is no space.)

it doesn?t make any difference.( )( )The public reads accounts (Remove one of the spaces.)

A good read.

Bill



 Comment Written 13-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 13-Feb-2008
    As always, you're right on the money, Bill. I'm a few pennies short. LOL You have very good eyes. I have trouble spotting those extra spaces most of the time. Thank you for all of your valuable suggestions. I've made the revisions.

    Marjorie
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