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The Gray

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Salad Shooter
 
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Another fantastic piece. I don't have a six to give, but it's definitely worthy. I was near brain-death the other day but managed to catch and odd thing that happened in your comments...

I think a hacker was trying to sabotage you and the two reviewers whose identities were both attributed to the one 4-star rating. I've no idea how they'd do it, but... you might want to ask Tom to look into it... The comment had one reviewer's name attached on the left and another reviewer's member name attached above the critique. It stood out to me because it was your only rating below a five... and... frankly... that's just never a valid rating for any of your pieces.

Have a fabulous day.


 Comment Written 21-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
    Thank you, Sue. Strangely enough, the four was my friend, TJ, but I think it turned out to be one of those times where the scrolling nature of the score slips to another number, but I appreciate you looking out for me. TJ pm'd me about it immediately.
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hello Marillion,

The randomness of nature is perhaps not as random as we assume. The randomness of love is as frustrating as it is beautiful. You express these truths eloquently here.
Insightful and wonderfully expressed, my friend.

jon


 Comment Written 21-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
    Thank you very much, jon. How true that is.
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Zen fusion? very intriguing mix of image and message, very, very well done. the second stanza really completes the first but with a twist.
kallee merra


 Comment Written 21-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
    Thank you, Kallee.
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L K Pinaire
 
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You're full of happy stuff today. It's well done but sad. I liked it but didn't love it. Nice work. I hope you have reason to write a happy work soon.

Good writing,

Larry


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2008
    Thank you, Larry. Actually, this was a happy poem because it's about proper endings, things ending as they should.
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"and I remember hearing, ?Love is blind,?
then I conclude, ?My God, I?m blind again.? -- For all who crave passion above a more sustainable affection, yes?

Another marvel from your pen.


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
    Thank you so much, Belly. That means a lot.
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Hi, I enjoyed your poem. It has a really pleasant rhythm to it, rather like waves, if as a reader you allow the punctuation to guide you. The final sentence is perfect. Nice analogy to use the ebb and flow of waves. Good work. Kind regards.


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
    Thank you, Mildred.
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shiraz2370
 
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It's been a long time since I have had the joy of sitting back and reading your work Marillion, and nothing has changed. Your smooth, inescapable imagery and depth still rocks me to the core....

Moving and simply outstanding.

Respectfully

Kyles x


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
    Thank you so much, Kyles, for the great review and sixer. Good to see your name pop up again.
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good piece david and informative also in the way you've mixed this up.
blind again hey, mayb blinkered, focus lies elsewhere, the imagery is great but the analogy of crashing waves doesn't seem to b too positive a finish/end foreseeing a conclusion so to speak... best of luck


b well

lerk


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
    Thank you very much, lerkun.
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Where to go from here, dear David, I ask every morning.
The lake is only down the street and frozen at this time. Such easy answer in the summer.
Go and jump.
Love,
Mila


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
    Thank you, Mila. Let me get my bathing suit on and I'm on my way.
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Very nice read, I like the wisdom in every line, the words flow smotthly and I can see and hear in my mind's eye the crushing of the waves along the shore. Well done, I like it.


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2008



reply by the author on 20-Feb-2008
    Thank you very much, wizard.
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