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Precious Gems: An Anthology


A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works

  47 total reviews 
Comment by
Adelaimar
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 18 -
Prince or Princess?
Made me smile.

I was confused at first -- he was introduced as a lady who used to be a prince. Aha-moment a few lines later. Nice one, got me, though.

I like that it's a story disguised as a poem.
I like that it used Old English words -- the word "weird" is Old English for "otherworldly" (triggering images of ghosts). But it is paired with "weak" -- so I am guessing that the use of the word "weird" here may evoke the vernacular meaning "odd".

It could be argued that using a mixture of Old English words and phrases as well as vernacular (slang) could be the trigger for humor. But, as in my case, it confused me a bit. It's like bait and switch (the Old English words and phrases baited me, but then, using the vernacular switched the meanings).

It must be me, then. I probably don't get poetry.

What I don't get is, how can the Prince be a "Tarnished Lady" that others point to and stare -- he had been banished and lives incognito, no one around knows his past. It says that he lives in khaki pauper's dress (here, again, I am confused: the word "dress" may be used as a synonym for clothes in general -- Old English (any article of clothing); but in our day "dress" refers to what women wear).

So, if the prince now wears a khaki pauper's dress -- he is masquerading as a girl now? But not wearing colors? That's why he's called 'Tarnished Lady'?

I like the humor, I get the humor. But I like images to feel veritable (I am very particular that way). Thank you for your piece. It is quite imaginative (no wonder it has a seal of quality).


 Comment Written 01-Aug-2016



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2016
    Ah, thanks so much for a very detailed and honest review! Actually, this poor prince was a cross dresser at an early age, and once banished from the Kingdom, went into exile as the Pauper's Princess, wearing, of course, clothing of muted colour. This was, if memory serves, a contest whereby a number of words had to be used in the poem with other restrictions, also if memory serves. A challenge, and one I hope I rose to, even though it didn't quite win lol! Thanks again for the lesson in certain words back in those days - I didn't know the "old" meaning of weird!! And it doesn't matter if you "get" poetry or not - it's whether or not you enjoyed what you read :)
Comment by
KatrinaWinters
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 20 -
My Dear Edwine
This is really lovely. It has a soft, romantic feeling even with the cloud of death about it. As with most deeply romantic and "true love" stories, it must have the threat of loss in order to make the fullness of love shine. Nicely done. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2016



reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
    Thank you Katrina, for such a lovely and very poetic, review! Cheers, Chris xoxoxo
Comment by
artisart4u
 
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Rating of Chapter 16 -
Calling Jack Frost - Come Home!
I liked reading this, He just left here, we are getting over a blizzard
that hit last weekend.

I really, really enjoyed reading this.

Your couplets are nice and good luck with it.


 Comment Written 29-Jan-2016



reply by the author on 30-Jan-2016
    Oh gee, thanks so much for reviewing this old one artisart! I really appreciate your comments and review :)

    Cheers
    Chris
Comment by
Zakarism
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 5 -
The Shadow

The poet has the burden to deliver a message. He is loaded with the inspired work of art and he is helpless, restless and unfulfilled keeping it dormant.
He tells the world that he has the facilities to live peacefully and happily within himself, without looking outwards.
It is a perfect work of encouragement and inspiration.


 Comment Written 12-May-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thank you!
Comment by
Zakarism
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 4 -
Raven Sojourn

The poet has mystically empowered the black bird. He has branded the bird an epitome of beauty and messenger of Satan, symbolic of death.
It is true, poets are always in serene dialogue with death, but it is sad enough to submit to what he had hitherto abhorred, dieing with the devil. It is philosophical tragedy.


 Comment Written 12-May-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    And thanks again!
Comment by
Zakarism
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 3 -
Repentance

The poet presents sin as a platform for confession. He sees God almighty as the author of life and to whom only humans should show remorse as symbol of atonement for forgiveness.
He has skillfully highlighted his elements of weakness and shortcomings. The rhyming and rhythms are professionally developed and aligned.


 Comment Written 12-May-2013



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Bless you!
Comment by
MAMONIA
 
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Rating of Chapter 18 -
Prince or Princess?
This is a fantastic write and enjoyable story
throughout. What a wonderful talent you have,
a gift from God for sure.
I thought this would make a fabulous children's
book. There are enough words to fill it.
Congratulations on your Seal of Quality.
You certainly deserve it.
My best to you. Marie


 Comment Written 05-Jul-2012



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Thanks so much Mamonia!
Comment by
comet55
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 16 -
Calling Jack Frost - Come Home!
I am still trying to get past the picture of Jack Frost. He's a real beaut, isn't he?! That was way fun to read and you are a rhymemistress! (my new favorite made up word) Keep up the great work....and would love to see a poem on alpacas! lol


 Comment Written 27-May-2012



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
    Haha, he is a beaut! I love the pic I found of him; it fits very well!
Comment by
lizzard king
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 18 -
Prince or Princess?
Im sorry but i just cant find anything to say about that! Simply brilliant your writing was so tight , funny , inteligent flowing and just simply enjoyable!! really enjoyed it in fact my favourite yet! Id so so apreciate your views on my work!! as im a newby and inspire to be a poet x


 Comment Written 09-Sep-2011



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
    I'm glad you like this one lizzard. I did enjoy writing it, and still like to pull it out and have a read every now and then ... just call me a narcissist! Thank you very much for your fine comments xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
Comment by
amaobong
 
 
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Rating of Chapter 19 -
For You ... If Only
i love this,its free style and expressive. it conveys in simple words exactly how the writer feels and what she wishes could happen.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
    Thanks so much amaobong xoxoxoxxoxo
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