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A Father's Love


Hardship on the Trail of Tears

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Comment by
GWinterwin
 
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Good job of depicting what happen back there long ago. Good word flow and rhyming make it easy to read and understand. What a terrible time and thing to happen in our nation's history.


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
    Thank you so much for the kind review. I really appreciate the 6 stars. Those are rare. Cowboy
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A simple and straightforward rendition of one specific terrible sadness in a terrible period in our history. The Trail of Tears is a neverending fount of awful stories for me, and I appreciate that you chose to highlight it. I do think the meter could be a little more consistent.

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 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    I'm really getting some weird ratings on this poem and I'm not sure why because very few people will tell me how to make it better. I've gotten all the way from a three to a six so I'm not sure what to make of it. Of course, I'm prejudiced since I wrote it and would like to know how to better it if it needs improvement
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Christine C Autry
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This was real and true. Very good poem kept me interested till the end. So many lives lost such a real feeling in this poem. Thank you for writing it.


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    I'm not real sure why this received a 3 from you when it's never received less than a five before. Were there any particulars where you think it could be improved?
Comment by
Raul1
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This sounds creepy. He wants to meet his father. This poem sounds like a story. The poem is interesting and I like it. Nice work! Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the review. Cowboy

reply by Raul1 on 18-Jan-2019
    You're welcome, my friend!
Comment by
Donka Kristeva
 
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Exceptional
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An outstanding, heart felt story of courage, sacrifice, the horror of a war and a father's love. I read it twice. Visually stunning, it takes the reader on a journey of loss .. and reunion at death. A brilliant write.


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019



reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thank you, Donka, for the enthusiastic review. Apparently, it struck an emotional nerve. I appreciate so much the 6 stars. Those are rare. Cowboy
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bard owl
 
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I wish I had a six star review left. This poem deserves 6 stars. It is exceptional in every way. I will never hold Andrew Jackson in high esteem for allowing this travesty and slaughter to occur. Some of my ancestors were part of that terrible Trail of Tears. Your poem moved me to tears. It aches with the reality of pain the Cherokee nation suffered. As I said, this poem is exceptional in every way. That the wolf tells the story is very inventive in this story of a father's life giving love for his son. Blessings to you, Linda


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
    Well, Linda, I wish you had six stars, too. Thank you for your kind remarks. My mother was of Cherokee ancestry so this is close to me. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
Comment by
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adewpearl
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I attended an outdoor pageant in Cherokee, North Carolina about the trail of tears - and I was truly moved by it - I am now just as moved by your poignant story poem. I love your fearless near rhymes, by the way. Your poem flows and tells such a story of a father's selfless sacrifice - it is unbelievable that white people thought these families they forced to march were somehow subhuman. Brooke


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
    Thank you, Brooke. My mother was part Cherokee which makes this a little closer to home for me. I'm glad you commented on the near rhyme or slant rhyme. So many reviewers say they should mark me down because it's not exact. Who cares, for goodness sake, if it's exact if it does what I want it to do? I refuse to try and put in an exact rhyme which sounds forced if a near rhyme works best. Thanks for allowing me to rant. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.

reply by adewpearl on 25-Mar-2009
    I actually posted an essay when I was new here about near rhymes because I was so spitting mad that people kept telling me my rhymes were mistakes if they were not pure rhymes. My essay is about how acclaimed poets like Emily Dickinson used near rhymes all the time ON PURPOSE, not just because they were second best attempts. Most people who used to bother me about it have finally come to peace with the fact I use near rhymes. LOL I always make sure to compliment them in other people's work because I know they are going to take grief for them from people of a different school of th ought!!
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This is beautiful and very sad. I have heard a lot about the trail of tears. I think a lot Indians left from the Chattanooga area for sad walk. You poem has lovely rhyme and rhythm as usual.


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
    Thank you, Beth. Your reviews are always welcome. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
Comment by
cheyennewy
 
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Hi Rhymeman....I am always sorry when I give out both my sixers early in the week. This is a wonderful poem and worthy of the highest score. I wrote a poem called "Earth Mother" a long time ago (I think it is posted here) I met a poet on another site who was a good mentor and friend. She was a full blooded Cherokee and would often ask me to write a poem for her especially when she was too ill to write. She passed away a few years ago and I still miss her critiques of my poems. In the poem I mention the Trail of Tears which I didn't know anything about before I researched it. You have used my favorite rhyme scheme 8/6 except for the English sonnets of course. This is a wonderful poem which I enjoyed reading. chey


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
    Thank you, Chey. This is such a nice review. You can come back anytime. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
Comment by
Amfunny
 
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This was very nicely written. I love your descriptive words. They make the poem just come alive and tell the story in a way that you can visualize it all as it is being told. Nicely done.


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2009



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
    Thank you for the review and the kind remarks. Rhymeman, the cowboy poet.
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