Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

Loop Poetry Contest
Deadline: Today!

75 Words Flash Fiction
Deadline: In 2 Days

My Faith Poetry
Deadline: In 4 Days

Fantasy Writing Contest
Deadline: Dec 14th

Free Verse Poem
Deadline: Dec 17th


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
Rooted in Dixie


Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Mortgage Money"

My early life and Southern roots

  33 total reviews 
Comment by
barbara.wilkey
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  4 (+1)
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  7
 
barbara.wilkey Recommends:
Football Chapter 34 part 3
Gabriel and Katherine find out Melton Ivory was at the game
Pays:10 points
10 member cents

 

#4 Ranked Novelist
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I am so sorry I had not read this post before. Thank you for re-posting it. I enjoyed reading and it's an excellent story of hope and happy endings. I know God had His hand in helping these people. You did a great job of telling the story. The emotion came through.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    Thank you for reviewing this one. I thought it was a pretty good story but it didn't get enough reviews back in 2009. It was the first time I'd revived one. None of the people who reviewed it then are still around.
Comment by
Mary Kay Bonfante
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  107
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  50
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Oh Beth, this is marvelous! I see that you've revived this post, but it appears that you also intend to build upon it and that a new book is in the works -- how wonderful! I'm out of Sixties, but excited that I'll still have more of your work to read, even after the story of raising your children is complete.

So here are the errors I found in this chapter:

...the boards had dried and shrunk,leaving cracks...
-->
...the boards had dried and shrunk, leaving cracks...

She heard the sputter of Glover's old `35 Ford as he turned into driveway.
-->
She heard the sputter of Glover's old `35 Ford as he turned into the driveway.

Eugene can't really afford College for me, she reasoned.
-->
Eugene can't really afford college for me, she reasoned.

She was disappointed when the Glover wasn't transferred after all.
-->
She was disappointed when Glover wasn't transferred after all.

By canning fruits and vegetables, raising chickens and milking the one cow, Lucille's parents had given them, ...
-->
By canning fruits and vegetables, raising chickens and milking the one cow Lucille's parents had given them, ...

She picked up one and a fine white power fell from the bill.
-->
She picked up one and a fine white powder fell from the bill.

"Thank God" she cried, rushing inside to show Glover.
-->
"Thank God!" she cried, rushing inside to show Glover.

I see that you've already written the Prologue, and I look forward to reading that next. It will be so wonderful to learn more about your parents and your Southern background.


 Comment Written 12-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 12-Dec-2020
    Mary Kay, you are a jewel. I've probably told you that before. I'm so pleased you are reading my stories. You know how helpful you are. I miss so much when trying to edit my own work. I so glad you liked this story.
    Beth

reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 12-Dec-2020
    You're very welcome, Beth. I loved reading it :-)
Comment by
2020 Recognized Writer of the Year
lyenochka
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  3
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  2
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  11
Script Rating
  Rank:  6
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  2
 

#2 Ranked Author

#3 Ranked Poet

#6 Ranked Script Writer

#2 Ranked Reviewer
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Oh my! What a story! All the while, I'm thinking, why didn't they just keep their money in the bank? Was the bank that untrustworthy? Whew! It's good it was just mildew!


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. During the Great Depression most of the banks went under. Millionaires committed suicide because they lost everything. Most people those days didn't trust banks.

reply by lyenochka on 11-Dec-2020
    Oh, I see! Makes sense. Then I would have worried about hanging those bills out on the laundry line. Lol! Oh dear - what a thing. Great suspense relayed in your story. I could recognize your parents.
Comment by
Mistydawn
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  23
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Two young people madly in love trying to make it in the world. What a magnificent story. The way you told it, was perfect. I felt like I was there with them watching it all unfold. When they found the bills my heart sunk. It broke even more when everything they tried to do didn't work. I'm so glad it all worked out in the end. It's very well-written, interesting start to finish. I wish I had to six to give, It definitely deserves it, but I'm afraid I'm all out.


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and the really nice comments. I'm glad I decided to revive this story. It is the first time I did that and think it has gotten more comments than it did before.
    Beth
Comment by
Judy Lawless
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  65
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  12
Review Stars
  Rank:  14
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
This story had me on the edge of my seat! Having lived a similar life during my early marriage (but not nearly as desperate) I could picture the wood stove and feel the drafts. I wanted to cry for them. What a relief that it had a happy ending. Excellent


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. I really appreciate you reading this. I so glad ;you liked it.
    Beth
Comment by
2020 Poet of the Year
royowen
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  10
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  
 
 Rank:  1
 

#10 Ranked Poet

#1 Ranked Reviewer!
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
What a delightful end to what seemed like a hopeless situation, plenty of people hid their money in strategic places back in those, enough banks had gone out of business for the confidence that it was a risk to put one's money in any place but the bank. Beautifully written dear Beth. Well done my friend, an excellent entry in this contest, blessings Roy


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the review and great comments. It is really not in a contest. I wrote it when I was on FanStory five or six years ago. It was in a contest then. I just revived to put it in my Southern Root folder.
    Beth

reply by royowen on 11-Dec-2020
    I still enjoyed it Beth, it was a winner for me,
Comment by
2012 Script Writer Of The Year
Spitfire
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  146 (+1)
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  106
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
I am so glad you revived this. It's contest material for sure. So interesting about the mold on the money. Thank goodness the sun dried it.
I may return to FS for awhile. My health hasn't been good since August.



 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    I so relieved to see you name. I was afraid you might be having some health problems. I really have missed you and your writing. Thanks for the wonderful review and the all those stars.
    Beth
Comment by
Gert sherwood
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  26
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  38
 
Gert sherwood Recommends:
I Have a Red Basket
My seven words
Pays:10 points
10 member cents

 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Beth, your true story of your parents before you were born
Its so well written and the way your told us of the finding of the jar of money, I could picture in my mind of how it looked.
made me wonder what in the world you at 17 and your 25 husband were going to do. Smiles was amazing of how you had me too anxious to find out. I found out and happy I did.
All ended well.
Gert



 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you Gert for the great review and comments. I'm so glad you are willing to read my stories.
    Beth
Comment by
Sankey
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  49
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  147
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
This is a great story. I look forward to reading more as I love TRUE stories! A few spags for you. old `35 Ford as he turned into (the)driveway.

G[L](l)over sighed and ran his finger

There [were](was) four hundred dollars

In Author Notes:It takes place [several] a couple of years before I am born

OR It takes place several [a couple of] years before I am born



 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you so much for the review. I appreciate the nice comment and help with the spags.
    Beth
Comment by
thaities, Rebecca V.
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  88
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  27
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
What a wonderful story that had my attention from the beginning to the happy ending. People love to bury their money, and sometimes bad things happen. Wonderful story!


 Comment Written 11-Dec-2020



reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
    Thank you so much Rebecca. There was a time after the depression that people didn't trust banks. I'm sure there was a lot of money that was buried. I had a neighbor that that though his father had buried money and he spent his time digging hole and searching for it.
    Beth

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 11-Dec-2020
    I suppose many a bottle was lost forever.
  -1-  2 3 4  Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
Guns and Badges
The past never rests


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy