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Comment by

Joan E.

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I admire your "whispers" metaphor. "I strain to hear them" is very evocative. I can identify with your "ears" hyperbole. The picture you chose resonates so well with your well-crafted nonet.

Comment Written 16-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009

Thank you very much for your kind and encouraging review. I appreciate it. Lisa

Comment by

skye

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Whispers speak often... memories are like fog.... your poem makes it all solid, not so ephemeral.
I love these forms, love the structure.
You have crafted a good poem, with super artwork.
Very well done.

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your very kind and enocuraging review. I really appreciate it. Lisa

Comment by

Josipher32

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This was a wonderfully written nonet poem. Great pyramid format. Good picture choice. Perfect syllable counts on each line.

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate it.

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jclark

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Very well done and excellent contest entry. You used a topic that we all can relate to and told the "story" perfectly. Best of luck.
Kindly,
Judy

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging review. I really appreciate it. Lisa

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Carol D Parker

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Good philosophy. Shut them out. Some times we can't. I always have to remind myself that you can't stop a bird from landing on your head but you CAN stop it from building a nest in your hair. It helps. Great poem. Very creative. Good luck in the contest.
Delora

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your very kind review. I really appreciate it. I thought of the idea for the poem during one of my insomnia spells (every so often I can't sleep). The memories kept "whispering" to me and I couldn't shut them out. I love your saying about the bird. I'll have to remember that. Lisa

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Jnetgame

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Excellent

This is an excellent entry. I have never thought of memories being like whispers, but it makes sense the way you explained it. Good luck in the contest.

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging review. I really appreciate it. Lisa

Comment by

perunest

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Excellent

A good poem, nicely stated. You do an
excellent job in likening memories to
whispers and stating your feelings
about them. I really like this! Carolyn

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your very kind review. I appreciate it. Lisa

Comment by

dtimes3

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Excellent

Intriguing poem. Good contest entry - good luck. Thanks for sharing.

Memories, good and bad, are whispers.
For the good, I strain to hear them,
wanting them to get louder,
begging them to speak up.
I cover my ears
for the sad ones.
I want those
silenced,
hushed.

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you very much for your kind review.

Comment by

KennyRogers

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Hi there jomo17 and many thanks for posting this delightful nonet, with its beautiful metaphor of memories being whispers, and the well-balanced contrast between the good and the bad. I'm quite new to FanStory and hadn't come across this format before. this seems to be an excellent model to follow. Best wishes, Kenny

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you so much for your extremely kind and detailed review. I really appreciate it. It was my first attempt at a nonet. I like the prompts, because many times they introduce me to a new form of poetry. It's a challenge to try new formats. Thanks again for reviewing my poem.

Comment by

Signaler

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Excellent

Hello Jomo, Though I can tell you that I understand the purpose of t his form of poetry. I can say that is has some mystic and beautiful imagery to it. Good work.

Angels, Signaler

Comment Written 15-Jul-2009

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009

Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate it.

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