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Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "I Remember You"

A woman is stalked by a fan

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Oh, my gosh. I'd never dare go into an apartment I'd bugged to rescue one of them. This dude is an adrenolin junky.

I absolutely adore the way you've described the behavior of the dogs when they see Norman in the penthouse. Great job.

Hugs,
Renie


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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2010
    Neither would I, Renie. I can't figure out whether he plans to replace it when he gets the chance or what. Strange. But then, Norman's strange, sooooo.

    Thanks a bunch, sweetie,

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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Okay, here we go! Danger and adventure. Funny that she cannot sense him yet, though she would never have thought that someone could get into her place.

A couple of things: bed, had gelled

promising another migraine

and she was uncharacteristically still



Thanks!
Zigzagmlt


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010
    Hi Zig,

    Let me check out those things and adjust where necessary. Thanks for the fine review,

    Gayle
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I hope Kip knows this man is up to no good. My dogs have an inner sense when it comes to dangerous situations. I'm sure Cathy's dog do too. Another good chapter. You are dong a good job.


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010
    Hi Barbara,

    Kip is an anomaly. I'm not sure you came in at the beginning, but Kip failed when it comes to being a guard dog. However, I think she's just about had it with the kicking. I would imagine the next time he does that, he'll come back with a bloody stump!

    Thanks so much,

    Gayle
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Never underestimate the dog, huh. Remember Hooch, he'd pick that guy out of any lineup. Another wonderful chapter. Great job.


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010
    Oh, let me tell you, these guys have an amazing amount of training. If you didn't read the chapter about that, let me know and I'll get it for you!

    Thanks so much for the great comments and review.

    Gayle
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okay wait a sec - what happened with kip's lip? wasn't it noticeable? didn't rudy see it? (confused there :-P)

one typo/spaggie....
Rain check <-- you gonna check for rain? or did you mean raincheck (one word)? lol

other than those two little nits
another great chapter!
don't know how he's gonna get her with those two dogs there! can't wait to see!

thanx for sharing!
shelley :)




 Comment Written 14-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 15-Jan-2010
    Hey Shelley,

    I'm going to have to send you this book when it's published. I don't think you've missed a chapter. You're right, raincheck. Also, if you've ever had a black dog, when the blood dries it's almost invisible until you actually look. Right now Rudy's fixed on Cathy.
    We have a sticky wicket here! Thanks for the great review and your comments!

    Grins and hugs,
    Gayle

reply by shelley kaye on 15-Jan-2010
    cool! :)
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This is a very good, tense, and exiting chapter. However, I have a few questions. I like you description of Kip's reactions to seeing Norman, but after being kicked a second time and yelping, why didn't Cathy who has exceptional hearing, hear something? Also, being on edge both Rudy and Cathy would, I presume, be very nervous and hearing Kip yelp would have gone to investigate.

This is not as big an issue, and more of just a questions, but I would think Rudy would be cautious about leaving Cathy alone, even though they obviously did not find any bugs. Actually, because they didn't find any bug I would think their concern would be focused on someone nearby watching. When Kip sees the same man the following morning I would think her response would be more than just curious. This is the man that kicked her. I know she is a trained guide dog, but guide dogs are also very protective. These are just things that passed through my mind. I found one sentence you may want to look at:

"Oh, you bet.... I know different expressions are used all over the country but this doesn't sound natural to me...something like, no problem... would read smoother... again, just a suggestion.






 Comment Written 14-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
    I think Rudy and Cathy are a bit complacent. They feel safe in the condo and are sort of letting their guard down. They have no idea that Norman is in the condo next door.

    I think the closest we can come to understanding Kip's behavior is that she's sulking. She wanted to play and the guy kicked her. Being Kip, as opposed, say, to Tony or Amy, she growls and leaves. That will change.

    I'll also check that expression. Sasha, thank you so much for the great review. I sure appreciate it!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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Norman has gotten back some of his bugs. He beat up Kip in the process. When Norman came back after Rudy left, the dogs didn't bark especially Kip. I find that hard to believe.


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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
    I know, it is hard to believe. Kip's sulking. She has hurt feelings. Thanks for the R&R!

    Gayle
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"Get control of yourself, Norman. If you continue to act this way you'll jeopardize Nathan and I can't have that. Get a glass of wine or something. We need to devise a plan." The voice in his head sounded worried rather than filled with its usual mockery and contempt.

Zinger - what is the name of this third voice?

Joel
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Glancing over her shoulder, Kip lifted her lip and growled under her breath.

Pardon the poor taste here, because the dog is hurt; but I'm suddenly reminded of a song popular in the 1950's called "The Little Blue Man" - he pursues a gal (she's singing about him) with ardent and indefatigable love, and she repeatedly throws him under buses etc. Finally he limps up and confesses, "I don't wove woo any mowah." It seems that Kip also just fell out of love on some gut level.


 Comment Written 14-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
    Aha! Yes, Joel. We don't know his name yet, but we've met the 'gatekeeper' the personality who protects the host. He kinda rides herd over Norman when he gets too carried away. He doesn't want Nathan to end up in jail.

    And you've got Kip perfectly. She has hurt feelings ... she only wanted to join in the games, and now he's kicked her, twice. She's going to sulk!

    Wait until Rudy gets back, we'll see her come onto her own shortly. Of course, she'll have good examples to follow!

    Thanks for the great ideas that The Little Blue Man!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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The pace and tension really picked up in this chapter..

From norman running to get the bugs...to the last line i found myself moving closer to the moniter and wanting to speed read to see what happenned..Great job cutting the chapter at the perfect spot..

Cant wait to move on to the next...



 Comment Written 13-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
    Thanks, Jaye. I'm thrilled you liked this chapter as we're gearing up for some big times here.

    Thanks for the fine R&R and comments,

    Hugs,
    Gayle

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Gayle,

Looks like Norman is finally making his move. Wonder how the dogs will react? I also wonder if Nathan will come out sometime and not understand what has gone on.

I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything here to criticize.

Dave


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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
    Poor Nathan. Just imagine his surprise when he does get out. But that's a ways down the story line. I always love your reviews, Dave. This one was great!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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