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Good one. I am intrigued to find out what happens next, since there was no The End parked here.

One thing: about to - I can't believe I'm having this conversation - take over your body?

It seemed to stand out, and I wasn't sure at first who was talking.

Thanks for another great chapter.
Zigzagmlt



 Comment Written 24-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
    We're a bit more than half way through the book, so settle in, this is a real book, with a beginning and a middle and an end. You'll get to read the end here, I promise!

    Gayle
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Interesting chapter. I would hate to suffer this affliction. It seems so sad that they really don't have a clue why they did things, or even remember doing them. Great job as usual. JOy


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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
    Hi Joy,

    Yes, I imagine any of the personality disorders are difficult to deal with. Life is enough of a challenge when you're hitting on all eight cylinders. To have a problem like that would be frightening for sure.

    Thanks for the great review!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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Another interesting post. It will interesting to see what you do with Nathan's condition. I wonder if it will get him off. HUMMMM, very interesting.


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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
    Hi Barbara,

    I think his attorney is going to fix it so he doesn't go to jail. Maybe time in a hospital, but then...

    Thanks for the great comments,

    Gayle
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that last sentence - the self-indulgent denial of someone whose actions let the alters emerge, yet who manifests his own sacred innocence regarding what they have done. That's a tightrope to walk, believability-wise, and you danced to the other side.

Smiles,

Joel
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It explained, to a degree, all the unfamiliar photos of her in his office. The alters had reemerged;

The reader mused at Nathan's nonchalance regarding all of Norman's obvious calling cards - diet, messiness, and those wretched photos - not to mention the occasional "OK where the 4#!! am I" events.

many an attorney pled DID syndrome as a defense on behalf of their client, never believing for a minute the veracity of their testimony.
"Do you know your alters, what their place is in what you do?"


your paragraphs are separated by double line-breaks; this one is single.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
    Hey Joel,

    Yes, there is much controversy in the madical field as to whether DID is a legitimate disease or whether it's just an easy ploy for the perp. I'm inclined to believe it's real...when it's real. I'd imagine it could be utilized by a smart perp with enough motovation.

    As far as his relationship to Norman, he damned well knows 'something' is going on. He's in denial. Also, the meds only control the acting out, like insulin for a diabetic. It has no effect on the disease, per se, just the control the person has over it.

    EE got me, huh! A pox on both his houses! I'll get him!

    Great review and comments, my friend.

    I see you got out of the political forum unsinged! Me? Not so much!

    Hugs,
    Gayle

reply by joelh605 on 25-Jan-2010
    [grin] politics is for the foolhardy or the fool-ish; you can argue with a fool forever, meaning the first one to walk away is frequently the one with more head than heat in the game. But then I've also been too busy to peek.
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Having spent as major part of my life being told I had DID, I am very familiar with the diagnosis and its numerous symptoms. I in fact, do not have DID and must admit my personal involvement with this disorder in some ways should disqualify me for an unbiased review. I do know several people who have been diagnosed with DID and are being treated for it. The counseling for this disorder is continuous, and sadly, should never stop. As far as taking medication, this is true but the medication are for symptoms associated with DID such as anxiety, fear, etc. There is no pill for DID. I wish there was. I like how you show the lawyer doubting his claim, most do. I believe in DID and find it a sad a tragic illness that is all too often portrayed on television and in books inaccurately. You are doing a very good job with this and I commend you. My only concern is the emphasis on meds. Yes, Nathan would definitely be prescribed medication but, as I said, for the symptoms that often accompany DID, not for the DID itself. Unless in the past two or three years a medication has been approved and curently being used on patients with DID that I do not know about (and that is most definitely possible) I suggest you give the name of the drug or drugs he was prescribed and stopped taking. This is a good chapter. It shows a side of Nathan that creates a comfortable level of sympathy and compassion for him. Very well done.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
    Hey Sasha,

    You make excellent points. The meds simply control the situations, which in Nathan's case is severe sociatal anxiety. He would take anti-depressants, but I hate to name one over the other for fear of taking on too 'real' a tone here, and God forbid, a reader might forget this is fiction and use what I say as real, which it isn't. That's one of the reasons why I was so vague about what he takes.

    I always appreciate your comments and input and thank you very much for the time and effort spent to keep me on track! You rock!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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I cannot see with Stanley income why he would qualify for a public defender. I've never known a jail cell with table and chairs. Interogation rooms, yes. Very well written.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
    Charlie, you're absolutely right. A PD wouldn't be defending him but here's the question. In a case like this, where he's never been in trouble before and doesn't have a lawyer in his pocket (and neither has the author!!) what would he do? Why wouldn't he just take the PD and then change if things weren't going well. I honestly don't know how that works. Any input would help. I can put them in an interogation room, no problem.

    Thanks for the great help and your eagle eyes!

    Hugs,
    Gayle

reply by c_lucas on 23-Jan-2010
    In a case like this, the PD might see him, but only to give him a list of criminal lawyers. Another place he might get a list is from the judge. He might have had legal dealing with an attorney over the purchase of his pent house. He might remember the name of an attorney he read about in the paper. Money is no object to hem. You're welcome, Gayle.
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THIS CHAPTER'S TOO SHORT... Here I was, sailing nicely down the river of words, carried along by the flow. No rapids, to speak of, nice scenery; keeping half an eye out for obstructions... When SUDDENLY...


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
    LOL! But Pat, if I kept the tension up through the whole book, you'd be a puddle of nerves at the end! Oh, what nice things you say. I can't thank you enough!

    Hugs,
    Gayle

reply by patmedium on 23-Jan-2010
    Sulks... hmph! Don't want your hugs! Want more story! You took it off me! I wasn't being naughty. (I mean, you wasn't in the room when I picked my nose) Grouch.
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Gayle,

There isn't a psychological illness in the World that a defense attorney won't put to good use. Ms. Scanlon's doubts are well founded.

I enjoyed this read and found one small nit:

"I admire her work tremendously especially since she'd [she's] blind ..."

Dave


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
    Hey Dave,

    Man, ain't that the truth! Attorneys can twist a story around so bad pretty soon no one knows what's going on ... their stock in trade!

    Thanks for the great comments. Got that ""d" out of there!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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Very interesting and went back and read it again, the idea of the DID is new to me, something tells me that this is going to get more interesting. The dialogue is good, and a bit mysterious, I think it is a bold story to write. The writer appears to know the facts. Great start.


 Comment Written 23-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
    Hi James,

    Thank you so much for the fine review and your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it and hope to see you back again soon.

    Gayle
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Enjoyed reading this chapter. There are many ways this story could go from here. Might be interesting to see which way you decide to go with it.
Only found one typo - she'd
Well done with this chapter, Buck


 Comment Written 22-Jan-2010



reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
    Hi Buck,

    I got that "s" in there, thanks for the eagle eye! I doubly appreciate your good word since this is the first of this novel you've read. Just for fun, you don't need to leave a review, just check out the chapter before this one. It'll give you a better idea of what the story is about.

    Hope to see you again soon,

    Gayle

reply by Trybuck on 23-Jan-2010
    Hi Gayle, I may just take you up on that offer, and I'm sure you'll be seeing me again, Buck
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