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Realist101
 
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HI Jay! It rains on my car almost each time I wash it. I am not sure if this is due to bad luck, or my inate ability to do something ass backwards, please pardon this expression, but it is true!! ") Hoping you have a great day!! Susan


 Comment Written 28-May-2010



reply by the author on 28-May-2010
    Bless you Susan. Not only do I get to thank you for Caitlin's and Ryan's poem, but now mine. Thank you so much!

    Jay

reply by Realist101 on 28-May-2010
    ") I really do enjoy all your work, I hope the kids will keep writing, maybe they can make a living at it someday?? I hope. Bless you, and your family Jay, and have a peaceful Memorial Day!! Cheers! Susan
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OMG lol, fantastic, hahahaha. what a great poem. i sat here like a shrub ruminating over that last line and how it applied and then the bulb turned on and i basically snorted. this is truly excellent my friend. very creative and very very funny. indeed the optimist would see it as such. this is one of my favorite haikus of all time just so you know. top five for sure, maybe top three. good job.


 Comment Written 29-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
    Hi, Xylok. I'm so confused! Tell me you got my response to your review earlier! I was so moved. But, alas! It can't now be duplicated. Just know that you are appreciated, friend.
    ;
    Jay

reply by Xylok on 29-Apr-2010
    i did get it, yes! thanks! i appreciate your thoughts as well.
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When done well I love and am amazed by these short works. I've forgotten the name for them right now but to put such complete thoughts into so few words is quite the accomplishment!
I liked it! Very good!


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2010



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Yes, it was my first attempt at a senryu. It's harder than it seems. I am grateful that you dropped by.

    Jay
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Not much more to say, is there? Well done.

I like to check out the work of others who have taken the time to review my work.


 Comment Written 26-Mar-2010



reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
    Thank you, North County Girl. Yup, it pretty well said it. it was my first Senryu. Glad you enjoyed it.

    Jay
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Hi Jay,
Your truism can be good or bad news depending on whether (pun intended) or not you want or need to have it rain. Out here in this desert, there is usually a 99% chance we won't get a drop even when nature is threatening with lightning and thunder in gray, overcast skies that defy the efforts of sunlight or moonbeams to reach us.

Good luck in the contest with this excellent and well thought out senryu, my friend.
Sue-z-Q


 Comment Written 15-Mar-2010



reply by the author on 15-Mar-2010
    Hi Sue-z-Q! So good to hear from you again. I always enjoy hearing from you. You are from the old school of FanStory writers! I appreciate your well-wishes, dear. Don't be a stranger.

    Blessings,

    Jay
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skye
 
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I am an optimist, so this appeals to me in particular.
I love the artwork, love the last line.
You have captured the moment very nicely.


 Comment Written 14-Mar-2010


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Patricia Crandall
 
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This senryu presents a strong image of an optimist. You have chosen your words well and I enjoyed the humor. The artwork compliments this poem and I can envision being inside a car in a carwash. I would recommend it. Pat Crandall


 Comment Written 14-Mar-2010


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Oh, so true. I love the artwork you chose for this well written poem. I can definitely relate to this poem. Good job! Patti :)


 Comment Written 14-Mar-2010


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well done, the format with such few words and yet they speak volumes, the picture was complimentary and i am smiling because where i come from the weather people couldn't predict the weather in a bet, lol


 Comment Written 14-Mar-2010


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Finally a funny senryu. Senryu Karai when creating the senryu form he ment it to be funny. All that i read in this competition were sad poems.

Good luck sir! I enjoyed reading it!
Best regards,
Alex


 Comment Written 14-Mar-2010


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