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  17 total reviews 
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snowwatt
 
 
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Cathy
I enjoyed reading this book. I was into with the dog training and how Cathy was able to keep it all together threw the kiddnapping. I would to read more from this author.


 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014



reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
    Thank you for the kind comments,
    Gayle
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Ritsal
 
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Rating of Chapter 38 -
Amazing Grace
I love Gracie. You brought the action and I could see all her moves. Very good chapter and one that could probably be expanded with Gracie's character. She needs more publicity. LOL

Best wishes,
Rita


 Comment Written 05-Jul-2011



reply by the author on 05-Jul-2011
    Hey Rita,

    That is one of my favorite chapters, huh? And I loved being able to talk about where she was going and what she'd be doing when she got there.

    Thank you for that fantastic sixer, Twinnie. I so appreciate you!

    Big hugs,
    Gayle
Comment by
MyYiaYia
 
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Lainie
Even not being familiar with the series, you would want to describe Ella and everyone else for that matter, who are in the previous books. As you say, it is a stand alone book and it can't do that without knowing who the MC are. Take 'Nancy Drew' books. She is always described, although in varying ways, in each of her books. Hope I didn't butt in where I wasn't needed. The following are the things I noticed, but may not be anything to you. Debbie :0)

-She's the first Seeing Eye dog they've ever trained - this threw me off a bit. I think because the 'they' you were referring to was talked about in the paragraph prior to this one. You may want to clarify who 'they' are.-

-Anyway, what do you have in mind?- In the story, she didn't mention anything to make this sentence relevant. It may be better said as 'Anyway, what's on your mind?'-

-Delicate eyebrows raised, she glanced from Lainie to her twin and back - In this one, it stopped me completely. You know that is a book killer when that happens. I wasn't sure if Lanie was the twin or Terry. I had to go back and reread. This can be easily fixed in one of 2 ways. FIrst:
Lainie saw Ella(,and her twin, Terry,) in the lounge [delete - with Terry,] or in the sentence above - she glanced from (her twin, Terry, to) Lainie (delete - to her twin) and back

-Sounds crazy(,) not to mention personal." -



 Comment Written 25-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 26-Oct-2010
    Oh Debbie, I feel so bad about this. See, there's been so much of this book re-edited, I don't even think this is in here.

    I'm going to send you the ms...I'm still final editing and dang it, I might as well take advantage of all this great help.

    Oh, what fun, just what I needed.

    Hugs,
    Gayle

reply by MyYiaYia on 26-Oct-2010
    Sounds good to me. I have to tell you though, I am not good with punctuation, maybe just comma's. LOL Debbie. I guess if I am going to read it anyway, may as well try to help. Deb
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MyYiaYia
 
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Cathy
Okay, I have started the book and so far it has met with my expectations. I love it. I can see it is going to be fabulous. Is this already published? Let me know if I am being too critical or not. I can be a pain in the rear sometimes. Especially to those who don't know me yet. I found these few things that bothered me somewhat, but you may not give a hill of beans about. SO, just ignore me or just say thanks. Debbie :0)

and thanked God again for her eyesight. - I am probably just being ticky here, feel free to ignore me, but this is the first time she has 'thanked God' so far in the story, so you might not want to say 'again'.

patio with its ocean view sealed the deal. - with this, you may want to say something else with it, since the ocean view doesn't matter to Cathy as she is blind and can't see it, although Lanie can. But it must have been important to Cathy in some way. May I suggest something like how much she liked the smell of the ocean breezes-

money would never be a problem - & - designs that kept her bank accounts flush - In one sentence, money will never be a problem, but the last sentence sort of give the impression if she didn't work, it might be. -




 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Hey Debbie,

    Oh, you're making me smile. Great suggestions and I sure hope I made use of them in the boo9k, lol! Yes, we'll be publishing it soon. Actually, again thanks to shelley kaye, I changed up the first two chapters, can't even remember how it's done here on FS, but any suggestions you make are so welcome.

    I can't believe it that there's no bucks left! What a peach you are!

    Thanks a double bunch!

    Gayle
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MyYiaYia
 
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Rating of Chapter 40 -
Norman In Charge
Very intense chapter and worthy of the win. It kept me on the edge of my seat the whole way through. I did not come across any SPAG. Well done. Debbie :0)

"You were the bell of the ball tonight, - I believe this should be 'belle' of the ball.


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    Well, how nice to see a review! Been ages since I posted. And then, to garner a five AND even more important, "belle"! Do you know how many people have read that book and never caught that?

    M'dear, I can't thank you enough except to give you a thumb!

    Again, THANK YOU!

    Gayle

reply by MyYiaYia on 24-Oct-2010
    You are most welcome. I don't know how many people have read it, but I will check. I can't wait to read the rest of it. I may not comment unless I find some nit somewhere, but I definitely want to read it. That is unless you would rather I commented. Debbie :0)

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2010
    You'll have to go into my Profile and pick it up there. The contest chapter is just part of the book, lol, which is why I was so surprised when it won!

    There's no money left on it, of course, and there have been oodles of changes, so if you can wait a bit, I'll send you the paperback as soon as it comes out! Probably March, but it could be much earlier than that. My friend shelley kaye is a huge fan of the series...there are four others, so with interest like this, I could have it out in a couple of weeks.

    Now, if you'd like, send your address to me in a pm and I'll send you the first one, Secret Lives. Actually, go to my website and check out all the books in that series.

reply by MyYiaYia on 24-Oct-2010
    I looked for the website address on your profile, and I must be blind, as I can't find it. So there are more. That is great! I don't care if there is money on a piece or not, just whether I enjoy the read. LOL! Shelley Kaye reviews my stuff sometimes, she is a sweetie, for sure. Yes, I will send you my address. Thanks! Debbie :0)
Comment by
allinmyhead
 
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Rating of Chapter 1 -
Cathy
This chapter touched on one of my greatest fears -- blindness -- and one of my greatest joys -- dogs !
Love the way you jumped right in with action and character development, and then giving the reader a bit of background further in.
This "sinfully delicious key lime tarts that gave their teeth fits." is great !
Love the last line. It, of course, makes the reader want to know what happened at the end of that decade.

Guide dogs: worked with a girl who used to train them -- Golden Retrievers. Wonderful thing to do. Very hard to part with the dog once you completed that first year of socializing and training though.


 Comment Written 14-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 15-Jul-2010
    Hey Lynn, thanks so much for stopping by and the super comments. It would seem we have much in common, my friend. Blindness scares me like nothing else. My mother had macrodegeneration and watching what that did to her..shudder!

    LOL, you'regoing to like my stuff. I've been blamed for weight gain by just about everyone who reads me consistently. Can't help it, love food!

    I've never worked with Guide dogs, gotta love those Labs, too. Clown in a fur suit immediately morphed into serious worker mode when that harness goes on. Giving one away after that kind of bonding must take a special person.

    Again, m'dear, thank you so much for the great review!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
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ZigzagMLT
 
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Rating of Chapter 43 -
Miracle
Gayle, bravo! You did a great job capturing the scene.

I must say that it might have been a little tougher than that for Cathy to have a dog on her when suffering from broken ribs.

That dog of yours makes the scene - it's that relationship, unbridled love, that did it for me.

What a lovely ending. Best of luck with getting this one out to your fans and new readers. I am sure that it is going to please!

Zigzagmlt


 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
    Hi Ziggi and thank you so much for the wonderful words. They warm my heart, for sure. I'm in the middle of giving this story a final edit and then it's off to be published.

    Again, thank you so much for your support and encouragement!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
Comment by
ZigzagMLT
 
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Rating of Chapter 42 -
Desperation
You take such chances in your writing, courageous ones. You set up situations, visual and clear, and then we settle in, knowing with certainty that we are in for a good ride.

The end of this chapter took my breath away. You acomplished it with a sudden, rather unexpected jolt. It made the characters even more human.

Thank you for the chance to read this. I can't wait to read more!

Zigzagmlt


 Comment Written 25-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
    Well, hello, my friend, and thank you for the wonderful review. I loved this book and am glad you did, too. Your comments and encouragement throughout this effort are most appreciated.

    Thanks,

    Hugs,
    Gayle

reply by ZigzagMLT on 25-Apr-2010
    Yuo are most welcome! Be sure and put it up for us fans at FS. Z
Comment by
dmjones
 
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Rating of Chapter 41 -
Breakdown
Norman's a real nut case, unfortunately also there are too many people out there like him. You give us a real good view of his character in this chapter or should I say characters. Well done and an interesting read.


 Comment Written 15-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 15-Apr-2010
    Hi and thanks for the great review! I take it you were just in the booth. It always takes me back when I see a review and I haven't posted in a couple of weeks!

    Thank you so much for the kind comments. Yes, Norman 'are' a riot! LOL!

    Gayle
Comment by
Gert sherwood
 
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Rating of Chapter 41 -
Breakdown
Hello showtimebook With me not reading any of you past chapters, I found this chapter very good.

The way I understood about you main character he seems to have a few different personalities?

Good luck in this contest.
Gert


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2010
    Hi Gert,

    Yes, he suffers from DID and right now is going through a huge power struggle.

    Thank you for the fine revivew and encouragement!

    Gayle

reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Apr-2010
    You are welcome Gayle
    Gert
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