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Angel of Mercy Part 5


Searching for clues....

  32 total reviews 
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suzzy
 
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this is a good way to put in backstory-it flows right along with the actual story-i still am just guessing who is the killer-felling sorry for the cop on the streets tho


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Suzzy,

    Thanks again for all your comments and continued support...CArol
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Colin Douglas
 
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Good job. Keep it going.

details:

"He thinks of himself as an Angel of Mercy. Maybe, in some weird, sick way, he thinks he's doing them a favor." This was discussed in one of the first chapters, but he's saying it as if it's a new thought.


 Comment Written 19-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 20-Apr-2010
    Colin,

    Thanks again for reading and commenting. I appreciate all your suggestions...CArol
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Gert sherwood
 
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Hello Carol,
you story has given a reader so many ifs and and what and who could be the unknown serial killer.
I'm sure you will come up with something unusual which we would never expect.
That there in my opinion is a good writer.

Gert


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
    Gert,

    Yes, I think you will be surprised by the ending...Thanks for your continued support. Smiles, Carol

reply by Gert sherwood on 19-Apr-2010
    Smiles Carol
    Gert
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Turtle... who?
 
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Hi Carol

Read this part of your Angel of Mercy. Great Job, easy to read, solid in the aspects I can think of, pacing, setting, time orientation, characters...

pleasure to read,

--Turtle.


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
    Turtle,

    I'm so far behind on these reviews...My fingers are flying trying to catch up...Thanks...Carol Hey, how's the pooch?

reply by Turtle... who? on 19-Apr-2010
    Dager's getting chunky. After who know's how long he was on the streets, then in animal shelter, I'm sure my bone a day spoilings don't help much. :)
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Nicki_Mist
 
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That wpuld be horrible begging the doctor for death and the brother begging to help him live. What an amazing chapter. Very creative with imagery. Keep it up.
Nicole


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
    Nicki,

    Thank you os much for all your encouragement and interest. Smiles, Carol
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Nanette Mary
 
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Hullo Carol ...

This certainly is a very gripping story and, as before, I enjoyed reading this part. I have given you 5 stars as I know you will consider the few changes recommended ...

* You have - a small American flag was incased in a clear plastic box. This should be - was encased ....
* You have -- "Ahh ... the flag ... did one (singular) of them lose their (plural) life (singular) while on active duty? I suggest - did one of them lose his life ....
* You have - We were wondering, if by any chance, you'd heard talk of a Good Samaritan ... I suggest - We were wondering if, by any chance, you'd heard ...
* You have - Let's get the car and go see Father O'Brien.
This should be - and go and see Father O'Brien ....
* You have - but maybe we can help someone else. Stop all this senseless killing. I suggest - but maybe we can help someone else by trying to stop all this senseless killing.

I now look forward to the rest of your story.
With love from .. Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Nannette,

    As usual, you are extremely helpful and I appreciate it very much. Smiles Carol
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Excellent chapter. You have kept me on the edge of my chair from the beginning and this one is no exception. Great writing and terrific amount of tension and suspense. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 19-Apr-2010
    Sasha,

    Thanks so much for all your kind responses...I truly appreciate them. Smiles, CArol
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rmdelta
 
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Begin Again,

excellent chapter, my friend. This was well written and the descriptives are great. Your dialogue makes this story work quite well and is your strength, I think. Well done

Reggie


 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
    REggie,

    I have posted Part 6 a few moments ago...I hope you will continue to follow the story. Thank you for your generous response. Smiles, Carol
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cheyennewy
 
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Hi Carol

I am in Texas but have to review and have 18 to do! A good chapter, very informative and interesting...home on Monday and on me own computer! Blessings..chey


 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
    Chey,

    Thank you for including me in your reviews while you are vacationing and I hope that you ar ehaving an excellent time. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
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lola29
 
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Aaah, you've added an element of surprise--could the murders have a connection to Justin? Max is certainly going beyond the call of duty, and I hope he finds some good clues soon.


 Comment Written 17-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 17-Apr-2010
    Lola,

    A few twists and turns still lie around the corner...I've posted Chapter 6 and the ending I hope later or tomorrow. I'm glad you are enjoying it. Smiles, Carol
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