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Angel of Mercy - The End


Struggling with the pain.....

  37 total reviews 
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RobinWrites
 
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This turned out to be a very inspiring story. Out of the trouble of another can come a goodness to strangers. It's sad his sister was so misguided. I've found no flaws in this well crafted story.


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    Robin,

    Awesome...I am thrilled you enjoyed the ending of the story. I appreciate your continued support and encouragement. Smiles, CArol
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Thank you for sharing your story. This is well written and to the point. Lots of dialogue always helps to enhance a story as you've used. Good character development. Lots of memorable moments. Good ideas. Creative. Entertaining. Keep writing. All best


 Comment Written 23-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
    resilke,


    Thank you so much for all your kind comments. I apologize for my tardy response. Life is moving too fast for this old lady. Smiles, CArol
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Turtle... who?
 
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Hi Carol,

I finished the,

it was enjoyable, everything tied off to conclusion. Things were active, lots of good descriptions.

I don't know if you introduced Juliet earlier in the story... my memory is a bit cheesed, but if not, it might be a good idea to toss her in somewhere, a memorable line, just so the end perpetrator isn't someone nobody has seen before. If she's been in a chapter, sorry, I just might have missed her,

Turtle.


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Turtle,

    Jerry ran into her as VanBuren and he arrived at the chruch and also she was in the yellow sports car as it zipped out of the family home....Thanks for the review...Carol
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This wasn't too long at all. I enjoyed it immensely and think you did a marvelous job with it. Well written, full of tension, fear, and nail-biting. Great ending too. Very nice work with this one.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Sasha,

    Thank you so much for reading and enjoying. I appreciate all the encouragement. Smiles, CArol
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Hullo Carol ....

Yes, I have followed this well-written story of yours from start to finish. You certainly had a surprise ending but, at the beginning of this chapter, I found it difficult to sort out who was who and what was going on.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ...... Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Nanette,

    Thanks for all your suggestions and constant encouragement...Smiles, CArol
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bayoupoet
 
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Carol, this has been a wonderful and well written story from start to finish. I was very surprised at the ending and I usually have it figured out. You really fooled me, with this one. Well Done!
sandra


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Sandra,

    Awesome...I enjoyed this short story turned novella and am athrilled that you did too. Thank you for your encouragement and for the dusting of stars...Smiles, CArol

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IndianaIrish
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I saved a six for the ending of your marvelous story, Carol. It had all the ingredients to keep a reader absorbed and loving the story. The ending is fantastic...I love happy endings. I hope you consider doing this kind of writing again. It's wonderful!
Karyn :>)


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Karyn,

    This story did keep my mind moving about as well...It was intended for a short story but I truly enjoyed giving it a long life. Thank you for all your encouragement and comments. Smiles, CArol
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Carol, a beautiful ending to a wonderful story. To make such an impact to help those in need is the greatest reward one can achieve.

I'm looking forward to the next project.

Mino


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Mino,

    I am thrilled that you continued ot follow the story and appreciated the message within it...Thank you so much for your kind response. Smiles, CArol
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You almost tied up all the loose ends... ... The extra space is to give you time to think. "Which loose end didn't I tie up?" ... Is there going to be a wedding or is the Captain and Tom just a fling? :)

Well done, Buck


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Buck,

    Now you really don't expect be to tell you everything that happens behind close doors now do you? Especially when they aren't my doors...lol Thanks for reading and for the smile.

    Carol
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It's a well written story and had me riveted right until the last word.
Let me assure you I am an ardent admirer or your stories and writing skills and I've been following the story right from the first part.
However, I found this part- the ending, confusing.
I couldn't understand why Judith behaved this way at the end. I thought something was missing in the story.
His eyes flickered- a typo.


 Comment Written 20-Apr-2010



reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
    Ramarao,

    She wanted to have her brother back home and thought solving his problem, eliminating the sick, would move him closer to that...Her sick mind didn't comprehend that another homeless individual always replaces the lost ones.

    Carol
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