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Who Surprised Who?


150 words of misunderstandings....

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Judith Ann
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I enjoyed reading this story and a very nice twist on the end. I love how you wove the story around the words; is did you weave the words around the story? Kind of the chicken or the egg thing... Anyway, very nice. _judy


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reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    JudithAnn,

    Thanks as always for the kind review. Carol
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I like this story. It's got conflict, drama, sorrow, resolution, everything a story needs. The surprise ending was a nice touch.


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    clorion,

    Thank you so much. Carol
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Very creative in using the words the way you did. I have to question if the rapid shift of the woman's feelings is because of the pregancy in the first place. I'm not too sure why a haunted house needed to be in the picture. Nice job.

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 Comment Written 06-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Sefrios.

    Thank you...
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MercyWrites
 
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From the moment James spew the red wine out I had fun reading your story. The line where she ran out the house was my second favorite. Your character reacted well with each other, and I love the character development. You have a very good ending. I always expect a twist from these short stories, but you still manage to surprise me.


 Comment Written 06-May-2010



reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    Mercy,


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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Sandollar
 
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I really enjoyed reading this. It was a complete and interesting story. It should do well in this contest. Good luck.

I found no errors.


Sandollar


 Comment Written 05-May-2010



reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    Sandollar,


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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findingmyroom
 
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Great job with the challenge. I can see this happening, complete with the dialogue and setting. You also have accomplished a true story, with a conflict and resolution.


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    findingmyroom,


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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Mariea
 
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A well written short story with good imatination. Characters and dialogue believeable. Thorough editing and easy reading. Good luck in the comp

Have a great day, regards Mia


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reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    Mia


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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nora arjuna
 
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hi there, this was quite hilarious at the end, and sweet too. i didn't see any spag and all words are well incorporated. i wish you luck in the contest.


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reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    arjuna,


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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adewpearl
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Who Surprised Who - Whom
You've stayed within the strict word limits and incorporated the contest challenge words smoothly, all while writing a lovely romantic story with a cute ending. Good luck in the story. Brooke :-)


 Comment Written 05-May-2010



reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    Brooke,


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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Connie P
 
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Nice humorous entry for the contest. You've recorded a very unique way to propose. Congrats for the exact 150 words used.
Good job overall,
Connie


 Comment Written 05-May-2010



reply by the author on 06-May-2010
    Connie,


    Thank you so much for taking the time to rad and enjoy my little story. It was fun to write and I am pleased with your encouraging response.

    Smiles, Carol
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