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200 Word Contest

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Comment by
tailypo
 
 
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I love the twisted ending! I really did see the main character as the victim, so was totally walloped by the role reversal. My only criticism is that the piece is SO short and the sentences rather clipped--the result of constraining entries to 200 words, not the author's fault. A few longer and more visually descriptive sentences would have helped this to flow better. With that ending and a bit more descriptive elaboration, this could be incredible. I would love to see this fleshed out in a less confined venue.


 Comment Written 09-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
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marcellawachtel
 
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Perfect! You sure made those 200 words (or whatever) work for you! I admired your easy, narrative prose. Pulling the knife from your pocket should have given me a clue that all was not sweetness and light here, but your ending sentence was a real 'kick in the head' flash.


 Comment Written 13-May-2010



reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    marcellawachtel,

    Thank you for the continued support and all your kindness. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
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bluedragon776
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Very nice. We are led to think that the protagonist is the victim when in actuality....
This piece read almost like poetry. I commend you because it would be very hard for me to limit a story to 200 words. Good Job!!


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Bluedragon,

    s always, I truly appreciate the time you took to read my story and for your gracious comments. Thank you...Carol
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Janalea
 
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This was frightening to me. It actually gave me goosebumps! Cogradulations on winning the contest! Your pic you chose was very fitting for the eerie feel you were portraying! thanks, Janalea


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Janalea,

    Thank you so much for the best wishes and for the generous comments. Smiles, Carol
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Judi
 
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Dear Begin Again:

Whoa! I was NOT ready for that ending! But it was pure genius as well as pure evil!

As I read along, I actually 'heard' his thought,
"Someone's behind me", and began to think HE was going to be a victim of some sort of macabre whatever!

Wow. If your intent was to shock -- which I am sure it was -- then you succeeded!

Great job! Extremely well done!! I can certainly see why it was chosen a winner! Judi





 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Judi,

    Thank you so much for enjoying the story. I really appreciate the kind review. smiles, Carol
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jl & bandit
 
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NICE Twist.... Of course you wolud win !!!
You never cease to amaze me with your writings !

Congrats on the win...

JL&B


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    jl & bandit.

    I never expect to win and when I do I'm thrilled like a kid in a candy shop. Thank you so much...Carol
Comment by
angelbonetsky
 
 
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I really enjoyed reading your submission. The level of detail you incorporated, really brings the charachter and the surroundings to life.


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    angel,

    Awesome...Thank you so much for your kind words and comments, for the encouragement I draw from your support, and for the lovely stars. Smiles, Carol
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adewpearl
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Great twist ending - I honestly did not see it coming :-) You build suspense as well as one can with a 200 word limit, and you explain the situation well. A solid flash fiction horror story. Brooke :-)


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Brooke,

    Glad you enjoyed the thriller. It is hard to build up the suspense with so few words. I keep practicing, hoping I'll get it right. Thanks again...Carol
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mtngalofnc
 
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Hi Begin Again,

Congratulations on this winning story. You did a great job with descibing this scene in few words. I was captivated from beginning to end and the ending was quite a surprise. Thank you for sharing.
Becky


 Comment Written 10-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Becky,

    Surprise endings are so much fun, but working them into such a short story is difficult. Glad you enjoyed. Smiles, Carol
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BethShelby
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This is great flash fiction with a wonderful twist at the end. You built the suspense and then it seemed everything was fine and the story was going nowhere and then you zapped us with that chilling last line. I didn't see it coming. Good job.
Beth


 Comment Written 10-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Beth,

    I am so pleased that you were surprised by the ending. Thankyou so much for the kind response. Carol
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