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Falling With No Where To Go


Beginning Again

  37 total reviews 
Comment by
winegoddess55
 
 
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You have a lovely flair for describing emotions, and I hurt along with you, as I read about your challenges during your child raising years. No doubt there are many moms out there who could relate, and feel your pain. As I read, I felt that we had so much in common, but I guess there are many who probably feel that way, lol! Good work.


 Comment Written 10-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sorry for my tardiness..Life is not being kind of late. Appreciate your kindness. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
MercyWrites
 
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I don't usually read biography, but when I do they always touch my heart. Your words flow naturally and I could feel the emotion through the writing.

One minor error.
The greatest gift of all is family. but. You have a period after the word family. I think you need a comma after family or capitalize the b.

I was touch by your story. I hope your family read your biography.


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Mercy,

    Awesome...they read it, but didn't understand it. Two took strong offense to my characteriszation of our family..I was sorry they didn't see what I was trying to bare my soul and say...I've decided I must learn to accept that giving love doesn't necessarily mean it will be returned in the same way. Thank you for the wonderful comments and the stars. Smiles, Carol
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Heynonni
 
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Your words ring so true in your heart and in my life. I too gave my all to my children and they grew away from me. Sometimes I think it was the intensity of my love, too hot for them to manage in their busy worlds. Other times, I think the estrangement is a family disease passed through generations. My mother to her mother, my mother to me, me to my daughters. I have finally decided to show the same level of love and affection I feel from them and keep the rest in my heart for another day. I too am starting again, with disabilities acquired from a life of hard work and strife. I like you, pray my daughters will never feel this pain of neglect and abandonment. Good luck to you. Get up each morning and start trying all over again. Don't look for outward signs of appreciation or approval, you have to look only to yourself now.


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Heynonni,

    Thank you for understanding and for acknowledging the struggles we face. I appreciate your kindness. CArol
Comment by
Ann Smith
 
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I feel the pain and sadness in the words of your story. It is hard to put into a review the right words to say for such heartache that you feel. The only thing I can think of is to make the journey back to a loving family takes one step at a time. I was an only child and I have two daughters. My mother was not perfect and neither was I. I try to remember that lesson and not be so hard on my mother or myself. The only thing you can do I suppose is just love your children and hope that someday their hearts will soften. LOL ann


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Ann,

    Thanks for the generous review. I appreciate your kindness. Carol
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I do understand the thought that has gone into this. I have three grown daughters and I found myself going through the motions this past Sunday. While I know they love me,I now wonder if they are also going through the motions. After reading this I wonder if other mothers come to this realization. I know this has helped me understand the feelings that crept through my mind from two days ago. Great job.


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Robin,

    Thank you somuch...It was difficult to write and even harder to post, but knowing that others feel and struggle with the same problems, helps me too! Thank you so much...Carol
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axelbeariter
 
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and then some more, in some cases./for that segment of the sentence, use and then some more in other cases. without the comma--too many some sounding words in that short spread---a fire that needed to flourish like the California wildfires/I hardly think you want to imply; to grow vigorously; succeed; thrive; prosper--the meaning of flourish, that this is a conotation to a destructive force.---seemed to find that satisfaction that I was looking for from others/plays better without the 2nd that--- I accomplished my goals and I am happy./change I am happy to am happy---my first born that loving a child is far more complicated./I hardly think loving is complicated. Raising a child certainly is, but loving is only hard when your child looks like an alien with twelve arms---I would be faced with such a terrifying struggle daily in a few short months of life./in the few short months of his life sounds more to the point---A contract I never questioned or asked why me./should read: or asked, why me?---and we can not ask more of him/ use cannot or can't---when asked. He works hard for his family when asked and receives little in return./too many when askeds in a short space-revise---A job that was demanding for adults let alone a small child./This is not a complete sentence---her need to stand on her own, closed the door on me/that statement is too vague--expand on it or use another phrase in place of closed the door on me---A beautiful smile, a wonderful laugh and a mischievous mind./this is not a sentence---gave me the gift of butterflies...tiny blue butterflies./explain---My heart breaks for our loss/use my loss or tell who constitutes our loss---The fourth child ... a petite, beautiful, little girl that I hoped to share so much./sentence is incomplete--if you add was or is and delete ... that sentence would make sense. Even more so it would if you explained how, where or to whom you hoped to share.---the overhaul picture makes her a good/overhaul should read overall---Everyday I try to encourage/put comma after Everyday---I believe some how and for some reason/some how is somehow---Somewhere, somehow I loss that special feeling/loss should be lost---Now I see a cold, methodical hug and eagerness to escape./nice descriptive line---He told me I was predictable when I made a comparison of someone else./That sentence doesn't make sense--rework---again, I guess. I thought--California wildfires, I guess.--in my eyes alone, I guess.-- I guess I neglected/Me thinks you guess too much--use varied phrases meaning the same thing.

pick up my pen is the only mention of a pen. Somehow, at least in my humble mind, it does not reach a plateau of meaning connected directly to your story. In a way, it seems to be just mentioned at the end as a prop in your lamentation about how your efforts to mold a loving family failed, and how you plan to move on by writing. I don't mean to belittle your efforts, but as you yourself will find, it is riddled with mundane errors that professionals just don't make. The one great part of your story is that you succinctly express how important it is to have a loving family; one that radiates that love in both directions--matriarch to progeny and back to Mom.

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 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Since your review was extremely difficult to read, I'll simply say there was nothing mundane about my life or my writing. Appreciate your time.
Comment by
jl & bandit
 
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I can say, from a childs point of view only for I am not a mother,that you already know the answers to your questions. I look fro and never recieve the approval of my mom, do all that i can to get one I'm proud of you out of her , but it sadly never comes. What makes it so hard for you is that you strived so hard to be perfect for them, but as you said, nobody is perfect. I have had to look for the love I give my mom in other places... she tells others how much she loves me and is proud of me, but after 47 years I have yet to hear it from her myself... what I'm trying to say is I have had to not look so hard at her to say it, but try to understand that is her, and I never will, but that she DOES.
I dont know if this makes any sence to you or not, but I do know you have written a vary moving piece and I hope that somehow it may get the results you are hoping for.
JL&B


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    jl & bandit,

    You are really spoiling me, my friend. I can't tell you how much I appreciate all your support and encouragement. The stars are only icing on the cake...your words are simply too special. It seems as if we walk down similar trails. I wonder if I will ever hear my daughter tell me she loves me before I die...Thank you...Smiles, Carol
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What a deeply meaningful and beautifully written personal essay, Carol. We all learn along the path of life that little is as simplistic as what can be reduced to a Hallmark card. You share so frankly, so thoughtfully - I feel privileged to have you share this with me :-) Brooke


 Comment Written 11-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Brooke,

    I was fearful of posting this, but my friend, Mel, keep encouraging me to let it go. I was amazed at the support I received and for how many were walking similar paths. Thank you so much for the kindness you have shown. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
mtngalofnc
 
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Hi Begin Again,

Great story and one which I can relate to so much. It is sad that we work so hard trying to do what is right and then our children distance themselves in trying to live their own lives. But I believe it is the independence we instill which turns and bites us back. Hopefully one day they will see the light.
Your story is written beautifully from your mothering heart. A pleasure to read and review. Those stars you very much deserve are yours. Thank you for sharing your story.

Becky


 Comment Written 10-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Becky,

    I wasn't sure how others would feel about me opening my heart this way. I am thrilled that you undertood the emotions behind the words. Thank you so much for understanding. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
MizKat
 
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Begin Again - Your story is touching. I can certainly relate to what you wrote and have even experienced some of the things you have. It is sad for a child to turn away from her mother, especially if they were very close at one time. It can be very hurtful . . . I know. Kat


 Comment Written 10-May-2010



reply by the author on 11-May-2010
    Kat,

    I guess they say no pain, no gain...but I sure wish the road would get easier someday. Thank you...Carol

reply by MizKat on 12-May-2010
    Carol - I know what you mean. My youngest daughter and I have always been very close. Then for several years she's pulled away from me and hardly had anything to do with me. Now she's coming around a little, but it will never be the same between us again. Kat
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