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Follow The Winding Road


Life's Adventures

  41 total reviews 
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dmjones
 
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A good start to a novel. This could go a lot of different ways. I love Katie. She seems so real and adorable.

(this should be we or he instead of you)You hoped I was carrying a son.

Mommy really needs to get busy(.)"

deep in thought. "(A)and he says


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Donna,

    It started out as just an idea, but now I love the characters too. Could become quite an adventure for the family. Thanks...Carol
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Krugerrand
 
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Solid opening for a novel. You can really take this intro in any direction, in just about any genre.

Really nice touch with the little girl seeing that her Mom's shoes were on backwards. And you've already begun to develop the characters of all mentioned.

Well done as usual.


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Krugerrand,

    Thanks for all the encouragement. Glad that you enjoyed the chapter. Smiles, Carol
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ladybird
 
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This is so very good, great writing. Sad, but with a message of hope, life goes on. The part where the little girl pointed out her mum had her shoes on the wrong feet was a good touch, made this reader smile. I'd really like to see this opening made into a book. And the artwork is beautiful.How do you go about putting artwork at the top of a posting, and does it cost anything?
Ps I really wish you luck with this entry.


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Ladybird,

    First of all, I want to thank you so much for always being so encouraging and for the great comments, I really appreciate the thoughts and stars.

    Secondly, it's really simple to add artwork. When you are posting a story, at the very top of the page it asks if you want to select fan art review or import from your own computer. Choose fan art review...once there you cn select or searchfor a picture that suits your story. To add it to your story, push the select button on top of the particular picture you want to choose. It will be imported to your posting.

    Hope that helps...If you need additonal info feel free to pm me.

    smiles, Carol

reply by ladybird on 12-May-2010
    You're welcome. And thank you for explaining about the fan art.
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1ClosetWriter
 
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Thank you for a wonderful story. Sorrow can provide some bittersweet moments. This sounds like a healing moment. Kate's innocence in portrayed so well.


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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Closetwriter,

    I hope that the future is a fairytale for all of them...Carol
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misscookie
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I love the artwork it beauitful If I look at long enough it put me in a reance.
your story is vry touching. I sense the feeling when the woman reach to toudh her husband and inhaled his scent. I went through this for a long time after my mate pssed away. this is a good write.


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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Cookie,

    It's funny how we remember so many little things when we lose someone we love. Smiles, Carol

reply by misscookie on 12-May-2010
    I think we know it but take everything for granted to apreicate them untill they are gone.
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I think you have the beginnings of a good novel here. This first chapter holds much promise and could travel in one or two ways towards sheer romanticism or a more melodramatic situation. Well done and good luck in the contest.


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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Treasuregirl,

    Not quite sure where it might lead, but you are right there are many different avenues to follow. Thanks so much..Carol
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fionageorge
 
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Carol, what a wonderful story. So sad, so poignant, and then a little girl brings her mother around to thinking that perhaps, maybe, life may not be so bad.
The dialogue was exquisite, the interaction between mother and daughter so sweet. Mothers weariness and slight impatience at times so realistic. A great and uplifting story, Carol. I wish you luck in the contest, and warmest regards, Marijke


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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Marijke,

    Thank you so much. I hoped the little girl's charm would win the reader over and Mom too. Thank you for the awesome review and the blessing of stars. Smiles, Carol
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Jeanie Mercer
 
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I like the implied hope of reconciliation, or a better relationship, between the woman and her father that is implied by the incident of the shoes on the wrong feet. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer


 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Jeanie,

    There's always a glimmer of hope if we just look for it. Thankyou...Carol
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Begin Again,

A truly beautiful, tender little bit of fiction. I liked the shoes-on-the-wrong-feet part. I chuckled along with Katie and her mom. Well done and good luck. You may want to consider editing this one item:

I had things to be done

might be better as:

I had things to do

Duane

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 Comment Written 12-May-2010



reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Duane,

    Thank you for catching that oops! I have corrected it. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
bayoupoet
 
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Carol, this is a absolutely wonderful story. I do love the way you write. You are so natural and it is such a pleasure to read for you.
sandra


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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
    Sandra,

    Thanks for putting a big smile on my face this morning. Truly appreciate your thoughts and generous stars. Smiles, Carol
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