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Carol! What a beautiful story about reality...this is how I feel, when my family interrupts me, and then the guilt!! Only we usually end up just going back to whatever we had to do...I am glad this had a happy ending tho! Excellent! I was really tense when she was in the hallway. Very fun read my friend!!! :) :) Luv, Susan


 Comment Written 15-May-2010



reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Susan,

    Glad you enjoyed the story. Smiles, Carol
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Forget "believe," it does happen. It is amazing how fast the creative juices can disappear when a crisis within the family comes to the fore. If it doesn't, pity the author. Nice ending and something that shows what is really important.


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    Cairn,

    s always, I truly appreciate the time you took to read my story and for your gracious comments. Thank you...Carol
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Carol, this is wonderful. You did it again.

Your fiction always reads so real, I have to check the upper right hand corner to be sure it's fiction. It threw me when you wrote "the love of my life is in the next room' and then a 'she', and I quickly looked at the category and realized it was a man. Boy, was I glad this wasn't autobio.

Well done, pat


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    Pat,

    My life has been topsy turvy as of late so I think the heart of the story probably blossomed from there, but dear friends like you let me know there is a light at the end of the tunnel. Thank you...Smiles, Carol
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Yes, unfortunately this happens a lot; the author's imaginary characters take presidence over real life and those nearest.

Well done :)


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    Razberry,

    Thank you for the continued support and all your kindness. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
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Sometiomes we forget the most important thing in life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.


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    Charlie,

    Yes, even unintentionally, life slips by. Thanks so much..Carol

reply by c_lucas on 15-May-2010
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
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Carol,
I loved your fiction story. Many times writers are in their own little world and the family doesn't understand or they act like your daffy. I love the narrative. Our writer is neglecting his wife for his passion flowing through his veins. I loved the last line of your excellent story:

"No, I'm happy right here, too." I kiss her again, remembering that she is the source of my inspiration. "I can be a writer tomorrow."

Great dialogue, internal thoughts and wonderful writing make for a very enjoyable read. I hope your not feeling blue if you are read my flower ode I posted for today. Your FS friend. . .Melissa!


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    Melissa,

    My life is upside down at the moment and I feel I have neglected everything and everyone...Thanks for the great review and suppport. Carol

reply by missy98writer on 15-May-2010
    It is my pleasure. I'd read you for free.
    Melissa!
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I am wondering how many times our creative juices stand in the way of our loved ones, or other responsibilities. I am sure way too often. Great short story. You have mastered the short story.


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reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Barbara,

    Thank you for the continued support and all your kindness. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
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Hi Smiles, yes, this capsulated world of the writer often hurts those outside. We pretty much live in another dimension with out characters. The poor husbands, wives and lovers must feel terribly excluded. After all how can they possibly competer with our perfect characters. lol. Well written and interesting. luv jada


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    Jada,

    Hello girl friend...I am so far behind on my reviewing on my responding that I should be shot I suppose. Have 125 for the last two days...My fingers will be dead but my heart will be full with joy...Thank you...Smiles, Carol
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Well done. It is certainly too easy sometimes to get caught up in our own work and forget those who love us.

"Tim stops for no one..." That "Tim!" He's always in such a hurry--never thinking of anyone but himself, either. :)

"...and then, without my conscious knowledge, it is night." "and now" instead of "and then." Also, since he's writing about it, it is with his knowledge. Try "without warning" or something similar. Or you could move phrases around. How about, "Yesterday flowed into today without my conscious knowledge, and suddenly, it is night."

"You know I have a dead line to meet." "deadline" is one word.

Keep writing.

Colin


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reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Colin,

    I had fixed the two nits but I appreciate and have used your thoughts on Yesterday flowing into tonight...Thank you...

    Glad you enjoyed and thank you for the kind thoughts.

    smiles, Carol
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Tim (time) stops for no one

What a wonderful story. I thought it was about you at first, then realised it was fiction and about a male writer. I found the story really interesting and it cleverly highlighted human emotions we are all capable of feeling. A lovely ending too.


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reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    Hotstuff,

    My life has been upended of late and I feel I probably have in some way neglected every thing and every one. I told this story from a man's point of view but I think we can all relate. Thank you for your continued support and your kindness. Smiles, Carol

reply by hotstuff on 15-May-2010
    You are very welcome. I am always happy to read your work. It gives me great pleasure. I hope your life is on a more even keel now.

reply by the author on 15-May-2010
    I'm still searching for the light at the end of the tunnel, but your kind words and that of others helps me breath easier. Thank you for asking..Smiles, Carol
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