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Evil in Paradise - Part 3


Mystery and Crime

  25 total reviews 
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dmjones
 
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Another good addition. Your characters as usual seem real to life. Agent Stafford appears he may become something more to Carrie, maybe.

One thing:
they gathered at (the)bar for


 Comment Written 16-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Donna,

    Thank you so much for all your support and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
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Another terrific chapter. You build intrigue and then leave with Carrie dreaming about the agent. Nice chapter with plenty of excitement.
Well written. luv jada


 Comment Written 16-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Jada,

    Thank you so much for all your support and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
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Two in a row. This is quite a treat. I like the way your are building a relationshipe with the agent and Carrie. This is very well written.
Error
their order and then left (them) alone.


 Comment Written 16-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Charlie,

    As always, I thank you...Carol

reply by c_lucas on 24-Jun-2010
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
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Satisfied that the foursome couldn't add anything further, they were escorted back - misplaced modifier - the people who are satisfied are the cops, not the girls being escorted
Carrie collapsed on the to the bed - typo
You continue to build suspense effectively, and you show Carrie's emotional response to the thought Joy might be the next victim of this killer in a compelling way. Excellent dialogue between her and the FBI agent as he draws out her memories. Brooke

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 Comment Written 16-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Brooke,

    I am embarrassed by my delay, but non the less grateful. Thank you for reading and for your support. Smiles, Carol
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P1
 
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o the caf© after the editor doesnt handle french
very well. maybe advanced editor might work

cafe down further same problem but apart from that
another wonderful chapter. i am really getting in
to your story.

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 Comment Written 16-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    I am embarrassed by my delay, but non the less grateful. Thank you for reading and for your support. Smiles, Carol
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