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Evil in Paradise - Part 4


Mystery and Crime

  29 total reviews 
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Sharesy
 
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I knew they should have investigated that scream when they heard it!
That maintenance guy is positively creepy.
Just a couple of snags:


By the way, I assume you would have mentioned if there was any news about her, but have you heard anything else[.]"
This is a question. should there be a question mark here?

How about I meet you in fifteen minutes at the [caf©.] - the spell check doesn't translate accent marks. If your keyboard doesn't have them, go into your control panel, and look for žlock, language and region'. that will show you how to change your keyboard settings.

Besdt regards,
sharesy


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sharesy,

    Thanks for your assistance and support...Carol
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melyuki
 
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AND the plot thickens,, such a great story unfolds my dear sweet big sis... from such a lovely gentle soul as yourself, where on earth do these ideas come from.... well, I can tell there are many hidden secrets lying deep inside of my big sis's head.. mystery, uniqueness, and on top of it all a fabulous story teller... enjoying this one so much, and now you have left us dangling on the sweet scent of underwear.. just lovely... until next chapter, i hang about in awe.. hugs galore sis, a great read,, luv from litte sis,xxxxxxxx


 Comment Written 22-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Sis,

    As you can see..I am behind as usual...Thanks for the wonderful thoughts, strs and love...Sis
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This sure ends with a turn of events. Your clues are nicely laid out and connect. Carrie's friends seem to be surface people, and she seems more centered with feelings for others. At this point in the story I don't trust anyone, even the policeman. Great mystery writing.


 Comment Written 21-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    vandawalker,

    As always, I am behind in responding but I sincerely appreciate the continued support. Smiles, Carol
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RobinWrites
 
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Just finished parts 2-4 and they are nicely done. This moves along nicely and I found myself so wrapped up in the story that I didn't find anything wrong. Well done as usual.


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Robin,

    As always, I am behind in responding but I sincerely appreciate the continued support. Smiles, Carol
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misscookie
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i HAD NO COMPUTER FOR TWO WEEKS SO I HAVE SOME BACK READING TO DO. BUT SO FAR I READ THERE IS LOVE, MYSREY, SUSPENCE AND A BIT OF LUST.
THIS IS A GOOD WRITE.


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Cookie, Thanks again CArol
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IndianaIrish
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Oh, WOW, Carol! I do love this story and the suspense you weave so expertly. The ending is just fantastic and can't wait to read the next one.
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Indy,

    As always, I am behind in responding but I sincerely appreciate the continued support. Smiles, Carol
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mtngalofnc
 
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Hi Carol,

Great chapter. This one has a bit of everything. The spark of romance and mystery. The maintance man may be weird, but that doesn't mean he is Joy's murderer, but I hope if he is that Carrie isn't his next victim. The ending is perfect and leaves me anxious to read more. Thank you for sharing.
Becky


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Becky,

    Thank you so much for all your support and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
Trybuck
 
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Paradise ain't what it ought to be right now. That maintenance guy is definitely one to look out for. I wouldn't want him in my cabin.
Well done, Buck


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Buck,

    Thank you so much for all your support and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
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dmjones
 
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The maintenance man sounds a little wierd but it doesn't make him a murderer. This really is a good suspensful story. I'm enjoying it.

A couple of things:

He's known to me(be) a smooth talker."

She unfolded it and read it.(I would take out one of these its)



 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Donna,

    Thank you so much for all your support and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
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Shirley B
 
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Oh creepy and handsome guys, What more does a story line need? Plus throw in a murdered woman just for kicks. I like the way this is headed. It makes me think I am watching CSI. Knowing you , You will throw in something to really throw me off. Great story, can't wait to read the rest, Shirley


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Shirley,

    Thank you so much for all your support and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
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