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Evil in Paradise - Part 5


Mystery and Crime

  26 total reviews 
Comment by
Sharesy
 
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Oh wow. The creepy maintenance guy is a definite suspect, but I really don't think he did it. It's too early in the story to solve the mystery already, unless this is going to be a very short story.
My best guess is that park ranger. I've had a bad feeling about him from the start. Sorry, just my meanderings. Nice job.
Best regards,
Sharesy


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sharesy

    Thank you as always, Carol
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melyuki
 
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sis, once again captivated by your mystery, I have zipped through the story, full of excitement and charm all at the one time.. your writing as always is impecable,always leading the reader further and further into the journey, without giving any clues as to the ending.. very clever.. looking forward to jumping into the next chapter. hugs always, for another great chapter in this exciting adventure.. luv mel xx alias little sis xxxxxxxxxxxx


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sis,

    Thanks as always...Smiles
Comment by
minopavlic
 
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Carol, within my own personal experience of 14 years in prison, I've seen and learnt many things. The kind of perversions displayed by Jackson are of a real degenerative nature. In and of itself, within time would as most deviencies, escalate to the next level. He may have not been guilty, but certainly, an accident waiting to happen, especially with alcohol involved as well.

Mino


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Mino,


    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol

reply by minopavlic on 02-Jul-2010
    :}}}
Comment by
IndianaIrish
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Oh, I love this chapter, Carol. The spark between Carrie and Darryl is building, and I like it. Jackson is just a pervert and not a killer...I think. LOL Look forward to more.
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Indy,

    Thank you...Carol
Comment by
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Margaret Snowdon
 
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I've said it before and will
say it again, Carol - your
a real natural - this was
so well written, grasping my
interest from the beginning
and holding it throughout -
most intriguing.

Margaret.


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Margaret,

    It is a pleasure to hear from you and thank you for your kind words...Crol
Comment by
Gideon Roth
 
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Wow, this is a well written story. You have great skills at writing passive free narrative and natural sounding dialogue. I am happy to have come across this submission. No SPAG to speak of but I did find one area that you may wish to consider. I have place it below for your consideration. Keep up the great writing...Tim, aka, Gideon.
With tool box in hand, (I think you meant to say toolbox as one word.)


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Gideon Roth,

    Thank you for your continued encouragement and following of my story. There just doesn't seem to be enough time in the day lately. I appreciate all your kind comments. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
Trybuck
 
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This work has reached the exceptional level
James should have agreed to meet Carrie, unless of course he's planning on surprising her and if that's the case, it might be James that gets the surprise, for it appears he's about to be history as far as Carrie is concerned.

The maintenance man is too obvious and too easy. They need to go on looking for the real killer.
Well done, Buck


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Buck,

    Wow..I simply love seeing stars especially ones from you. Glad you are engrossed with this one. Appreciate all the kind thoughts. You are so right about the maintenanced man. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
Belinda
 
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Now the case is getting somewhere. But you did hinted upon it, I know. This is an interesting chapter, Carol, with the romantic atmosphere and all. I look forward to the next.


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Belinda,

    As always, I am behind in responding but I sincerely appreciate the continued support. Smiles, Carol
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RebelRose
 
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his drive to success ... it's just my opinion but I believe this would sound better to say ...his drive to succeed. For some reason, knowing how you love to surprise us with your endings, I don't think it is the maintenance man. I always think I know where you're going with a story and then you surprise me once again with your clever endings. I will just have to wait and see.


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Patti,

    As always, I am behind in responding but I sincerely appreciate the continued support. Smiles, Carol
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Very well written chapter. You did a marvelous job conveying the subtle attraction between Carrie and Darryl. I found her reaction to hearing the terrible details of Joy's death believable and well done. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.


 Comment Written 23-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 24-Jun-2010
    Sasha,

    As always, I am behind in responding but I sincerely appreciate the continued support. Smiles, Carol
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