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Evil in Paradise - Part 6


Mystery and Crime

  28 total reviews 
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Sharesy
 
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"Are you sure you are okay to drive by yourself to the airport[.] - should be a ?

Oh no. You can't kill off Carrie! At least that's what the last sentence seems to be leading up to. Moving on, now. Can't wait.


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sharesy,

    What a thrill that you have continued to read...Thank you Carol
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oh damn sis, did you have to end like that.. now how do you expect me to sleep tonight knowing there is a prowler on the loose... that is not right. just as well i am an insomniac and will stay up all night until i read your next chapter.. you better get writing quick smart else i will be awake for days.... great story line again ,sis and always , remaining exciting right to the last word...
sending big hugs until the next chapter, luv and smiles from you know who.. . xxxxxxxxxxxxxx


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sis.

    Trying like hell to answer these reviews..everyone deserves a thank you but life keeps dropping these buckets of yuck on me...as you so well know...Smiles, Sis
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Hullo Carol ....

I think I might have missed a chapter but, this one is interesting, gripping and well written as always. There are just a few small queries ...

* You have - a Peeking Tom .... the old saying is -
a Peeping Tom ... but perhaps that has been changed where you are?!
* Once again, you have this much over-used choice of words - the overstuffed chair which appears is most of the stories on FS these days.
* You have - Well, I'm not a law enforcement .... I suggest - a law enforcer ... OR ... a law forcement officer .... because a law enforcement is not correct.

Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
With love from ...... Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 25-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Nanette,

    I have copied your suggestions which I greatly appreciate and as soon as life stops pouring rain on my head I will make the corrections...Thank you again..Carol
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Two more wonderful chapters and each one left me wanting more. I can tell when I've enjoyed a story. I'm disappointed when I come to the end and I am so into it, I don't find anything that needs correcting. I'm wondering where James is in all of this - could he be the killer? Or, is he too busy with someone else to care? I really do enjoy they way you show a story and I find myself learning every time I one of your pieces. Great work.


 Comment Written 25-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Robin,

    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol
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fionageorge
 
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Hi Carol, another well written chapter (I am a little confused, are these not part of a novel? Yet you are posting them as short stories?)j.
Great writing, as always, and you humanise all your characters. Your narrative is desriptive, and brings the scenery to life, and you make excellent use of dialogue.
I enjoyed the read, as I do all your writing, my friend.
Warmest regards, Marijke


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Marijke,


    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol
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You are becoming a true artist at cliffhangers. Now I am literally holding my breath waiting to find out what happens next. Very well written and you did a terrific job conveying Carrie's concerns about her so-called boyfriend. But leaving hanging with not knowing if Carrie is the next victim or not is perfect.


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sasha,


    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol
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Carol, I'm sorry I'm reading this backward, the last few days I battled heavy siatica, in lower back, and just starting to come around. I most liked the conclusion in regards to Jackson. Our past will always come back to haunt us, and could easily convict us even without substantial evidence.

I'm looking forward to see where this leads.

Mino


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Mino,

    Appreciate your time and kind words..Carol

reply by minopavlic on 02-Jul-2010
    You are welcome Carol. Your writing is also appreciated
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cheyennewy
 
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Hi Carol,

Suspense and intrigue!! What else can I say about this chapter. I was afraid the FBI had the wrong man and I know I can't rest easy until you tell us who the man is that is creeping up on Carrie. You are such a good story teller and never stop! Well done. Blessings, chey


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Chey,


    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol
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fictionwriter
 
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Oh, no. Poor Carrie is in trouble. I though it odd that used the name Carrie Underwood is an odd choice as she's a famous singer in the US. Just a heads up. I loved this story. Well done.


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Joy,


    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol
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OH MY!!! What a way to leave the reader!! Absolutely fantastic, Carol ... but, will we have to wait long for the next chapter??

I like your characters in this story and the dialogue is wonderful. Love it!
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 24-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Insy,


    Thank you for all your support..Smiles, Carol
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