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Evil in Paradise - Part 7


Mystery and Crime

  33 total reviews 
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Juliette Chamberlain
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I haven't read this story before but it is quite easy to pick up on what is happening.
Your descriptions are good even down to Carrie vomiting over her surroundings, and the resultant odour.
Not a pleasant way to find out that one's fiance is actually into some illegal dealings but better to find out I suppose.
I guess that is not quite the outcome Mike was hoping for in his conversdation with James.


Juliette


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Juliette,

    My apologies for my delay in thanking you for all your continued support and for enjoying the story. I appreciate every encouraging comment.

    Another of those unexpected "life happens" has knocked at my door claiming much of my time...I apologize for my delay in thanking you and in writing. I certainly didn't plan on the story being so long, but it took on a life of its own as well. Hopefully, I can see a light at the end of the tunnel for both.

    Smiles....Carol
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Hi Carol,

Wow! What a chapter. I could feel the intensity within these criminals minds and as for Carrie her fear is quiet obvious. Somehow I wasn't surprised by James answer. Your chapter is well written the flow is good Good ending as well. Can't wait to read the next one. Thank you for sharing.
Becky


 Comment Written 27-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Becky,

    My apologies for my delay in thanking you for all your continued support and for enjoying the story. I appreciate every encouraging comment.

    Another of those unexpected "life happens" has knocked at my door claiming much of my time...I apologize for my delay in thanking you and in writing. I certainly didn't plan on the story being so long, but it took on a life of its own as well. Hopefully, I can see a light at the end of the tunnel for both.

    Smiles....Carol
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Okay, you have me of the verge of freaking out. What a dynamite cliffhanger this is. I seriously hope someone, hopefully the nice FED guy figures out what's up and saves her. This is terrific writing...a real nail biter!


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Sasha,

    No freaking out...but it is nice toknow I can put you on the edge of your seat...Thanks! Carol
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Some men can't be pushed. Others are just plain stupid. You are doing a wonderful job with this story. It is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Charlie,

    Thank you so much for your continued support and kind wrods...Carol

reply by c_lucas on 02-Jul-2010
    You're welcome, Carol. Charlie
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Oh no, poor Carrie. What a cold-hearted boyfriend. But that's the drug dealers other side, isn't it. They only care about the money, girls come and go. Well done.

that'll take good care of him(,) and you and me will be livin' the life of ease."

I'm the boss(,) and him and you best





 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Joy,

    Thank you as always, Carol
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Hello Begin Again
All I have to say my eyes couldn't believe how well you told the scary scenes of what Carrie is finding out
( I believe how the other women got murdered.

Gert



 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Gert,

    Hope you are doing well...Thank you as always...Carol
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You write very well! I've not read the other chapters but am caught up in the story with this introduction. Your descriptions are believable and the dialogue realistic.
I have mental pictures of Carrie and Mick.
I will go back and read the other chapters and see if I am close in my imaging. I like your writing!


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    JimLee,

    Thank you for enjoying this story. I truly appreciate your support. Carol
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Another good addition. Really good action description. Colin sounds like a wierd one. I can't wait for the next one.

One thing to check:

one he feared might rear it's(its) ugly head


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    Donna,

    Thank you as always...CArol
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A gripping chapter. I enjoyed reading the dialog the best because of the dialect. I wish you best of luck with the rest of the book.


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    bluedragon,

    Thank you so much for your kind words..Carol
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This mystery has taken a turn for the worse. It's got good conflict and the evil characters are super Evil. I like the addition of a deranged person. Good writing.


 Comment Written 26-Jun-2010



reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
    vandawalker,

    Thank you so much for your support and kind ecouragement. Carol
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