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Evil in Paradise - the End


Mystery and Crime

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Comment by
shygirl21
 
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Ahhh...I do love a happy ending - and a bloody standoff lol. Fab story! You must do more like this - you definitely have a talent for it :)


 Comment Written 25-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Pamela,

    Missed you girl...Thanks for reading. Unfortunate circumstances have kept me away from this site for most of the summer but hope to return soon. Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for the wonderful comments. Smiles, Carol
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L.lora
 
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Carol this was such an
intense and exciting
addition. It flowed
smoothly with narratives
that were aptly descriptive
and great dialogues. Most
enjoyable and was a bit
surprised that you gave it
a fairy-tale ending...LOL. Lora


 Comment Written 14-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
RobinWrites
 
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This ending came all too soon, okay maybe not as soon as you intended, but for the reader it's too soon. The entire story will well written, intense and left me on the edge of my seat. Great job and I do hope to read more of your not so short stories.


 Comment Written 13-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
hotstuff
 
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What an action packed chapter. You concluded your story very well. After all the violence your ending was much calmer (I love a happy ending.)


 Comment Written 13-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
allinmyhead
 
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Very much appreciated seeing the summary of characters.
Rufus's internal dialogue interspersed with narrative gives insight into his limited intelligence and fear of the ramification of forgetting Mick's instructions. Nice way to bring this into play.

The section section, the confrontation between Darryl and Hank was tight and taut. Very nice. The dialogue was fast and hard (how do you get into the heads of male characters so well). Lots of tension.

Rufus is 'played' well. His horror at the realization of what he got himself into was very character-revealing.

Lovely, romantic, satisfying ending.

GOOD JOB all round.


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
melyuki
 
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well i still have no six to send, but sis, what a great ending to a wonderful mystery. Never in my wildest dreams would I have unfolded this story as you have done. It's been a fabulous tale of intrigue, mystery, confusion, horror, romance, and emotion all wrapped together to make a very fine and incredibly moving journey.. congratulations sis on this grand book of yours... a fantastically penned story from my big sis... hugs to you and congrats on finishing it at long last... well done sis... lots ofluv as always from Mel xxxxxx


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
ladybird
 
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Oh, damn, I wanted to give you a sixer, but all out. What an ending! I could have gone on reading this, and I'm sorry to see its end. The whole thing was great, from start to finish.
****** You've got your six stars, lol.


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol

reply by ladybird on 19-Jul-2010
    I enjoyed reading this story so much. I look forwad to your next posting.
Comment by
jadapenn
 
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Hi Smiles for miles. It was grand and kept the reader going with plenty of good action, dialogue and suspense. The Colin was a real mean piece of animal. At lease old Hank managed to get himself into a favourable position. Now you need to tell us how James was cornered. You can't let the villian get away.
Well done. luv jada


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
bhogg
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sheltered in cage (a cage or cages)

package and delivery it (deliver?)

A very good read - just a couple of things to look at above. Were there earlier posts for the story? It looks like I missed them if there were.
Regards, Bill


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
Comment by
dmjones
 
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A good ending though I wanted to see James get what he deserved. I'm sure he will.

One thing to check:
The job(')s done."


 Comment Written 12-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Life has a strangle hold on me and I apologize for being so slow in sending my heartfelt thanks...I always appreciate your support and encouragement. Smiles to you - Carol
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