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A Promise From The Heart


Easy words, but harder to keep

  22 total reviews 
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Readywriter52
 
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It feel like I came in the middle of a conversation. I wonder what lie he told and why his mother thought he would never lie again.


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

    Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
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Hello - Your micro fiction story is touching and sweet. I enjoyed reading it and finding out it was a conversation between a mother and son. Very well written. Kat


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

    Life still has me in a strangle hold but I hope to be back soon. Thank you for enjoying my work and the continued encouragement. Smiles, CArol
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Neat and charming, and with a clever pay off. I didn't guess what was coming, yet the scene was entirely convincing and likely.
This is the best of the entries I have read so far, though I have a few to go. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Good luck.
Sally


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol
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This is a terrific entry for the micro fiction contest. You tell a complete story and end with a lovely surprise, revealing your characters unsuspected relationshiop. Lovely message and great artwork! Goo d luck.


 Comment Written 19-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Sorry for such a late thank you, but I do appreciate your support..Smiles, Carol

reply by Minglement on 08-Sep-2010
    You're so welcome, time frame or no. Take care, Marcia
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Just thought I would check some of your postings that I have missed. What a sweet story and one so many of us can relate to. It has put a huge smile on my face.


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Been gone for so long and can't return as yet..but I needed to say thank you for the suppport. Smiles, Carol
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Cute story. Good little boys do keep their promises. At least, some of the time.

I especially liked the sunbeam creating a halo.

Best of luck in the contest.

Regards, anabelle


 Comment Written 01-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
    Anabelle.

    Thank you very much for the kind review. I too like to remember how my little boys thought the world circled around their mom...it's a shame they have to grow up. Smiles to you...

reply by anabelle on 02-Aug-2010
    It's a shame on one hand, and a pleasure to see who they've become on the other.

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2010
    Oh so true...This week end my youngest son was able to follow his dream and produced a short film for an upcoming festival...from a flash fiction story I wrote. My mother's pride spilled over everywhere...shed a tear or two when I saw how he came out of his cocoon when producing...a different person for sure.
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This short story started out as a marriage proposal and ended with a lesson from a mother to a child. Great job of mis-direction and surprise. Love this.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Robin,

    Glad you found the ending a surprise...I love those twists that leave the reader guessing. Smiles to you...
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What a great way to explain the love little boys have for their mothers. This is a very clever piece and it really made me smile.
rose


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Rose,


    Sorry for being so far behind...had to steal a few minutes this morning to thank everyone. I truly appreciate your encouragement and constant support. Smiles to you...
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The reader waits expectantly for the bride and groom to be revealed. Instead it is a little boy looking at his mother.
Well set up, and well told.
Best wishes for the contest.


Juliette




 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Juliette,

    Thanks for the wonderful review. Glad you enjoyed. Smiles to you...
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Well done with this contest entry. All the elements of a story are present and a surprise twist makes us smile.

I suggest two minor adjustments:

Her arms wrapped tightly around him, enfolding him with her love.
(Delete "tightly"--superfluous adverb. The context is enough to 'show' the tightness--"wrapped" and "enfolding" are good descriptive verbs:
Her arms wrapped around him, enfolding him with her love.)

She smiled[.] "Good little boys always keep their promises."
(Comma changed to period. A "smile" is a facial expression, not an attribution of speech.)


Thank you for the entertaining and enjoyable microfiction.

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 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Suneagle,

    I always appreciate your expert opinions and suggestions. Thank you for your assistance.
    Smiles to you.....
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