Sue by the Seaside
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My Gain Your Loss - An Accident?

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Comment by
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Carol, wonderful to see you back in full swing, my friend. Love this little FF. Why not enter into the contest, it would be a worthy submission.
Oh, yes, twin sisters, just like any other sisters. Devious - when it comes to being winners.
Warmest regards and hugs, Marijke


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Marijke,

    I did enter one but decided to write a few others..Glad you enjoyed. Smiles, Carol
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This is a great flash fiction story. The rivalry comes across loud and strong in a subtle way and the ending is so humorous. I had to smile yet felt sorry for Kaitlyn too.
Pity it isn't a competition entry. It's very good.


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    hotstuff,

    Thank you for your kindness. I enjoyed the short but devious story too. Smiles, Carol
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What a waste! My mouth was already savoring those fresh and yummy fruit pies. Your story was short, precise and to the point. Even if the ending was not very nice.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Amada,

    The dog thought the ending was wonderful! LOL Thanks for the review and thoughts..Smiles, Carol
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Hi Carol,

Cute pic and perfect for your story. I bet thats one canine who is in trouble. I know just how she feels as I had a similar incident to happen. Loved the story and you did a great job telling this one in few words. Thank you for sharing.
Becky


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Finally had a few minutes to call my own and enjoyed writing these short stories today. Glad that you enjoyed one of them. Smiles to you, Carol
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A dastardly tale of what lengths sibling rivalry can go to. The ending comes at the reader faster than an angry pit bull. Well written, enjoyable tale that would have made a strong entry in the contest. Best wishes, Hector


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Thank you for reading and enjoying. I appreciate the kind response. Smiles to you, Carol
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Hmm, I wonder whose the
dogs favorite girl or is
his hunger the key. Wow,
innuendos about in this
delightful reminder how things
can sometimes go awry. Most
enjoyable, flows well...
descriptions and dialogues are
spot on. no nits or spags... Lora


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....Carol
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Oh wow, poor Kaitlyn... she is not as well prepared as her competitive twin, Karrie. Interesting story, Carol, the last paragraph is so surprising and pathetic for Kaitlyn.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....Carol
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This is absolutely delightful. Reminds me of my sister's Thanksgiving dinner being scarfed down by her new, not so well trained really big dog (can't remember what kind). I enjoyed this very much. Great work.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....Carol
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Well that just isn't fair. I know a dog just like that. Ate more than a entire roast fresh out of the oven, and a whole cherry pie in the time it took to run to the bathroom. Well done.


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    Thank you for enjoying my short little story. It was a fun one to write. Smiles to you....Carol
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hey sis, i can see it now, and hear the canine licking his creamy coated lips with a big devious grin all over his face. great little story with such a cute connotation. I havent even got round to imagining the look on the girl's faces yet,, I am still stuck in view of the happy doggy...his tail is wagging a treat... luv the micro fiction story,,, good one sis.. hugs and luv from mel xxxxx


 Comment Written 18-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
    As usual. I am further behind and can't find the light at the end of the tunnel...Thank you for being so kind to you big sis....Hugs, Sis
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