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Afraid of the Dark


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  36 total reviews 
Comment by
RobinWrites
 
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The images of my children and their bedtime protectors floated through my mind as I read this. I believe everyone needs a little Fred in their lives. Great job.


 Comment Written 28-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Robin,

    My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.

    Smiles to you, Carol
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allinmyhead
 
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This one just made me laugh out loud with memories. I did almost the same thing to cure my son of his fear of monsters under the bed. I made him a 'monster neutralizer' out of aluminum foil and also gave him a stuffed toy to talk to. It worked ! This story brought it all back. Hadn't thought about it for years.
Yours might be fiction, but these things really do happen.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
    allinmyhead,

    Thank you for enjoying my story and I am glad that it brought back good memories. I, too, gave my son a big hairy blue monster...resembled a biker with chains and bandana, absolutely ugly, but it did the trick. A few years ago we were at a garage sale together and someone else had one...of course, he had to buy it. Thank you for the kind words. Smiles, Carol
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bookishfabler
 
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Again very cute story. I honestly don't know how to review these. I never really come across shorts this short except now. To me they are more of a scene than a story. But, I think you got a lot of info in a small bos=dy of work. No nits
hugs book


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
    bookish,

    Though I enjoy writing long stories where I can really develop the characters and situations, I do enjoy the challenge of writing something in a limited framework too. Thanks for the review...Carol

reply by bookishfabler on 22-Jul-2010
    me too, though my shorts are longer than these, I love writing them tooo.
    hugs Heidi

reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
    Suneagle said they had to be 100 to 110 words so even though these weren't in the contest I tried to follow his rules...Thanks Heidi for enjoying. Smiles to you,,Carol

reply by bookishfabler on 22-Jul-2010
    no problem, your welcome
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MJMuraco
 
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Your story is touching and it was ironic for me that his name is Fred. That is my husband's name and his Dad's name. This story touched my heart.


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
    MJ,

    I am glad that the story could take on a personal note for you..It meant something to me as well, My som had this ugly stufed monster that looked like a cross between a biker and an alien...It was his safety net. A few years ago, we found its twin at a garage sale...now that he's all grown up...of course he bought it. Smiles, CArol
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Nanette Mary
 
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Hullo Carol ...

This is short and sweet and well thought out. It is also realistic because what you have said in this very short story is something that would really appeal to a little child.
There is just one change to suggest ...

* You have - and trudged toward bed. I think this would read more smoothly as - and trudged towards (as we say in standard English) his bed.
I would put Daddy and Dad with capital letters.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 20-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Nanette,

    Thanks for continuing to offer your suggestions and support. They are greatly appreciated. Smiles, Carol
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melyuki
 
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ah nothing nicer than a cuddly toy given with love from your Daddy, when you are alone and frightened of the dark. a cuddly toy that brings joy to a little heart. you have painted a feel good emotional picture for us Sis... in your very short and sweet story of love and kindness between father and son. great wording, and beautiful imagery.. hugs from Little sis. xxxx


 Comment Written 20-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Sis,

    As always, I thank you...Smiles and hugs, Sis
Comment by
sugardog
 
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Ahhh...sweet piece of micro fiction. I enjoyed this warm, cuddly little tale. I remember sleeping with stuffed animals and it did make me feel safer. You always write such heartwarming stories. Nice job on keeping it tight and interesting! This is good practice-I should be writing some too :) Hope you are well and having a nice summer! Dana


 Comment Written 20-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Dana,

    My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.

reply by sugardog on 02-Aug-2010
    You're welcome an boy do I understand the time/writing thing!!! I'm not here much lately either... Take care, Dana
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Oh, what a great Daddy to remember Fred and bring him to help his son deal with the dark. I love the line that he always keeps one eye open! Great flash.
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Karyn,

    My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
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Rama Rao
 
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An excellent short story well scripted.
I liked the way the young boy felt assured. He had his dad's smile and a one eyed Fred to dispel his fears of monsters. What else could he ask for?


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Ramarao,

    My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
Comment by
Shirley B
 
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Great story and great imagery. I could just picture this all in my head. This micro story is filled with so much love and trust, it made me feel good just to read it. I kind of wish I could feel the way that little boy does after he got his Dad's toy. Thank you for sharing, Shirley


 Comment Written 19-Jul-2010



reply by the author on 31-Jul-2010
    Shirley,

    My time is so limited of late to enjoy what I love - writing, but I greatly appreciate knowing that even my short little bits of whimsy are appreciated. Thank you so much for your kindness.
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