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Mother and Child

  38 total reviews 
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hdenease
 
 
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I love this, but it probably hits home for me because I have not yet been able to have a child. I can envision myself speaking to my unborn baby and reading to him or her while in the womb when I read this. It's also refreshing to see writing about the good side of pregnancy and not all the pain and anguish associated with it.


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    hdenease,

    If it's what you desire, I pray your wish is granted. Motherhood is a blessing I will always cherish. Smiles, Carol
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LadyWave
 
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I really enjoyed this very short story :) I loved the sweetness and the lightness of it. I thought it was a lovely tale of an expectant mother.

One spelling I noticed - [Its] sweet taste teased


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    LadyWave,

    Thanks for enjoying and for catching my nit. Smiles, Carol
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Dom G Robles
 
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This short fiction is cute. A circus box spilling over a tray and the writer chose to pick three kinds of animal goodies one after the other. The first is a lion Jack, the King of the Jungle, then the second one is an elephant with big ears and long trunk and the third is a bear, big and strong like her child's Dad. A sharp jab made her jump. She made a mental note to buy another box, after all
she was "eating for two and teaching too."


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    Dom,

    Thank you so much for stopping by and enjoying. Smiles, Carol

reply by Dom G Robles on 19-Aug-2010
    You are welcome Carol. Anytime. Dom
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gschroer
 
 
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I appreciate this short essay. I have given birth to 7 children, 6 of whom are still alive on this earth. I can empathize with this author who is talking to her unborn son regarding life's pleasures and experiences.

While the descriptions of the box in which the animal crackers are contained is vivid (I remember the animal cracker boxes), it still seems to me, unfortunately, a rather mundane essay about being pregnant and having a conversation with your baby. I'm sorry, but it is hard for me to review this work. I remember too well how I felt when I was pregnant (8 pregnancies in 10 years). I was so busy after the first two arrived that I had no time to speak to my babies I was carrying. I asked God to please take care of them and our family and fell into bed each night, exhausted, only to awake the next morning with energy enough to do what I had to do that day and then repeat the action the next night. I envy the author because she had time to speak to her child. I tried to give them the love they deserved while in the womb, but I find this essay just a bit unrealistic.

Her descriptions are excellent and her writing flawless so I must give her a very good review.

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    gschroer,

    I've given birth to five children and faced many many trials and tribulations throughout their lifetime, but I wouldn't give up a moment of it. In the still of the night, I often sat in the dark, listening to music and talking to my unborn child...even when times were rough. It was my salvation. Having children is a choice and enjoying them a gift. It's sad that you weren't able to find those special moments.

    Smiles, Carol
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Rdfrdmom2
 
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Begin Again:

one of my all-time favorite cookies
is the animal cookie -- plain, without
the frosting some companies put on them
now -- my granddaughter is now getting
old enough for me to share them with her

I'm loving it and she may accidentally
learn her animals that way -- then gulp
them down

loved this piece
love,
jan


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    Jan,

    I was searching for a calm, warm thought last night and this memory popped into my mind. I ampleased that you could relate as well. Smiles, Carol
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marcii
 
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What a sweet story, using the excuse for eating for two so one can have another box......funny.
You tend to having cravings when pregnant and perhaps this was hers.
Marcii


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    marci,

    It was...My memory as well as the weight I gained told me I enjoyed it too! Smiles, Carol
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sweetwoodjax
 
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this is very well written with good form, good flow and a good story. i like your play on words about eating for two and teaching too. i wish you the best of luck in the contest


 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    sweetwoodjax,

    Thanks for reading and for enjoying the short story. I appreciate it very much. Carol
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What an adorable story in which this expectant mother is talking to her unborn baby about the animal represented by each animal cracker she is eating, just like a mom might talk to her toddler when feeding him. Eating for two and teaching too - cute word play in the end. A thoroughly enjoyable little story, Carol. Brooke :-)

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 Comment Written 18-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 19-Aug-2010
    Brooke,

    I was searching for a calm spot last night and this memory came to mind. Regardless of the turmoil, I always enjoyed those few private moments when I dreamed of the future and shared my thoughts with my unborn child...Music was and still is a very important part of their life and I think that love started in the womb when we shared moments in the dark. Smiles, Carol
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