Love Bites Write a poem about love gone wrong or lost love. It can be sad, raw, or just plain angry (Just keep it clean). Express the emotions of the darker side of love. Any style or length. Be creative.
There is lots of action in your micro fiction and you told a sad but good story painting a scene from it in eloquent words. It was interesting to read all these great entries. Best wishes to you.
Cheers, W ^-^
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
Time has escaped me and left me in an abyss I think..Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this..Carol
Hi Carol, It took me a minute to get it, too early I guess, so I read it a couple of times. Now I get it, the wild stallion is bidding goodbye to the other horse and Amy. They went over the cliff when the snake bit the horse.
I do have one suggestion and really it's only that because it's good the way it is. I was thinking you add a little suspense to this by moving the paragraph starting with "The wild stallion... to the second paragraph. Making "In the valley... to the third and maybe say "In the valley below him,...
Comment Written 22-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
Strange...that's how I originally wrote it but change it because some one was confused who Amy and the fallen horse were. They thought I had more horses and people. But adding one word (him) ...Thank You...seems to clarify it more. Appreciate the help...Smiles