Sue by the Seaside
A rude Limerick: Be careful what you sit on.
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  40 total reviews 
Comment by
Gert sherwood
 
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Hello author,
oh your entry is so darn sad and drastic.
I found you entry so vivid and hard to view the death of such a beautiful horse.

Gert


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
    Gert,

    Me too! A part of life but one we would rather not endure. Smiles to you
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Fireshadow
 
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Wow! This is such a powerfully poignant storyline. That you were able to narrate it in a micro-fiction format is brilliant work. Surely this will be a strong contender in the contest. Good luck. Amarillys


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
    Amarillys,

    Thank you for your wonderful and kind review. I truly appreciate your comments and wishes. Smiles to you
Comment by
Shirley McLain
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  Rank:  86 (+9)
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Excellent micro-fiction. You have the adventure and hook at the beginning and kept my eyes glued to the page. The horse is a lovely picture.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
    Texasgal,

    A beautiful specimen isn't he? Thanks for the wonderful thoughts. Smiles to you...
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zoocq
 
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Very interesting story line in micro fiction. Vivid images...it would do well as a story fleshed out and an en joyable read I'm sure. Thank you.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
    Zoocq,

    I too can imagine a longer story..darn these flash fictions, we are so restricted...maybe another time. Thank you....
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vandawalker
 
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Was your inspiration this beautiful picture? This is quite a story of intense emotions even coming from the grand stallion. I enjoyed this very much.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
    Vandawalker,

    No, I had to search the net for the picture but I suppose somewhere in the recesses of my foggy brain I remembered a story about a wild stallion. Thank you...
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RebelRose
 
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An interesting story. I know it had to be short for this micro-fiction contest but I think this could be incorporated into a longer story. Your descriptive words made the reader feel as if witnessing the scene first-hand. Well done.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 22-Aug-2010
    Patti,

    Many have suggested it be a longer story..I shall have to consider it. Thanks for reading and for the kind thoughts. Smiles to you
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RKagan
 
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This story paints a very vivid picture. I can see the entire landscape. The animal recognizing his coming death is very true, somehow they do know. the art work is perfect for the piece. good job


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    RKagan,

    Thankyou ufor continuing to support me..Hope to be back full force soon. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
JoAnna77
 
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You have told this tragic story well in just 102 words. I particularly like the description of the wild stallion standing on the cliff edge, and the final sentence.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Thank you..smiles to you
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mtngalofnc
 
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Hi Carol,

Wow! What a story and so well written in so few words. Your imagery is great and it was easy to envision this scene and has a smooth flow. Good job and thank you for sharing. Best wishes with this contest.

Becky


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Becky,

    Thank you...smiles to you

reply by mtngalofnc on 08-Sep-2010
    your welcome.
Comment by
misscookie
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Oh that artwork is outstasnding. I do have a love for horses you know. Ythe artwork is perfect for the picture. Just reading the first line had my heart beating fast this was very exciting


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Cookie, Thank you..smiles to you

reply by misscookie on 08-Sep-2010
    Don't worry be HAPPY!!!! AND KEEP SMILING
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