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bookishfabler
 
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Oh what dilerious fun. I smashing story. I wonder what happened with Roberto? LOL.

Oh(,) my God, I'm so sorry. I didn't-"


gossiping about theformer first lady and her family by none other than the woman herself.

(seperate theformer)

hugs Book


 Comment Written 25-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Book,

    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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hee hee this is such a fun story! And exactly why I never talk in bathrooms about people!

Nice to read your work again, I must go find out what happened with that thriller you were writing!

Pamela x


 Comment Written 25-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Pamela,


    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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Smiles, this was a grand story. You had so much excitement and suspense going and the humour was good. I guess Hillary is used to all this type of thing going on. lol.
Loved the essay.
Best wishes for the contest. luv jada


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Jada,


    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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Judian James
 
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Good one Carol. I guessed early on, but it was still so much fun to read. I've been sent on seminars like that to places like Nassau and you're scheduled from 8am until 5pm followed by mandatory cocktail parties! excellent piece of writing from the perspective of two young women. well done


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Jude,

    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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This is a fun story. I can imagine something like that really happening. But Hillary would have to be more gracious that I imagined her to be to invite two strangers to her daughter's wedding. The part about the conversation from the bathroom stall is totally believable.


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Beth,

    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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Your story is so entertaining and fun, Carol. The dialogue is lots of fun and what a way to end a boring conference! Best of luck!
Indy :>)


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Indy,


    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol

reply by IndianaIrish on 08-Sep-2010
    I miss you and your work, too, Carol!! I hope to see you back real soon, too. Smiles to you!!
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Realist101
 
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OH NEAT! And the blond girl looks like a younger version of you Carol!! Cute! This is so well done, you always use dialogue so perfectly, just like we are listening to people there talking in front of us! And I love this ending too. Just perfect...") Hugs!! Susan


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Susan,


    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
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Hi Carol,

What a great story and very believable. I can see something like this happening. I saw one nit...
She'd just been caught gossiping about theformer first lady and her family by none other than the woman herself.
(space between the and former)
Your story is interesting and has a good flow. A pleasure to read and review.
Becky


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Becky,

    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol

reply by mtngalofnc on 08-Sep-2010
    The pleasure is mine and you are welcome. Look forward to hearing from you again. Hurry back!
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funny and imaginative written with a touch or realism hard to doubt...very funny also

it could happen to any body, any time...

thanks and good luck
Adina


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    apelle,

    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol
Comment by
rama devi
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WOW--what a tale! is it fact or fiction? (i thought the contest required non-fiction but this is listed as fiction so am unsure).

Anyway, it is very well penned with superb flow, development and dialog. I could see the scenes flash like a film in my mind.

Couple of suggestions-

*back to back speakers

maybe use hyphens.
back-to-back

*Simultaneously, their mouths dropped open and their eyes were glued to the couple(')s activity.

*"Excu-," the woman's voice started to reply. (no comma after dash)

*She'd just been caught gossiping about theformer first lady add space between THE and FORMER

Good work. A strong contender.

So, did this actually occur?
If so--wow. if not, good idea for the story.

Love, rd


 Comment Written 23-Aug-2010



reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
    Rd,


    Been away from the site for so long and miss you and all my friends. Thank you for enjoying my work and I hope to be back soon. I truly miss the pleasure. Smiles, Carol

reply by rama devi on 08-Sep-2010
    AW, thanks dear Carol. missed you too. it is good to be away sometimes but then also great to return. HOpe you will be back soon as well!

    Lots of Love, rd
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