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How the Animals came to Be.

Legend: Turtle man, Goanna man and girl fish.

  14 total reviews 
Comment by
afternoonlight
 
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An old time fable like story..just perfect for me. I liked the tale told, it is native and ancient and spiritual and sentimental. Smile.


 Comment Written 29-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 29-Sep-2010
    Thank you my friend, sometimes simple tales are the best. Cheers, Kay.
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chita
 
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You have great artwork and you are descriptive in this writing-you give information that I was not aware of and that made this more exciting to read--I have a fascination with turtles and I know that this reptile is a survivor--the man sustained himself and the girl live in the water as a fish with the turtle--a fascinating read and well done.


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 25-Sep-2010
    Chita, Thanks so much for reading, glad you like these simple tales. Blessings, Kay.

reply by chita on 25-Sep-2010
    You're welcome and God Bless:))

reply by chita on 25-Sep-2010
    You're welcome and God Bless:))
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Nanette Mary
 
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Hullo Aussie ....

As this is an Aborigine legend, it is probably written in the manner in which they speak. I had noted a few possible changes but ... have discarded them in favour of accepting your writing of this story just as it is.
Thank you for sharing this old tale with us and I look forward to more. Being legends, they are very different from reality.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
    Australians write differently, this was written in the manner that we tell tales. Thank you for reading. Blessings, Kay.
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Meshe Nair
 
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Wow! Interesting story. This is the first time I have ever read/heard about Austrailian Aboriginal story. Reads and flows well and I didn't come across any mistakes/spags.

Great read.

Meshe Nair


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
    Thanks for reading and we have many legends about the early beginnings of our country. Aboriginals have inhabited Australia for 54,000 years. Cheers, Kay.
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Nan Beeson
 
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Dear Aussie:

Absolutely loved this story from start to finish. To tell the truth, I read it because IT WAS LISTED AS A SCRIPT INSTEAD OF A STORY. I don't as a rule read stories: only Scripts and Poetry.

Your very first line reminded me of the Bible. It reminded me of Genesis 1 and 2 prior to Genesis 3.

I love the fact that Budgial and Gunual were both in love with Gugu and how Budgail brought her flowers and listened to her talk and tenderly held her in his arms. What female wouldn't like that? I know I sure would.

The entire story is so endearing as well as educational for children; and especially that the Goanna lives in the desert and is a strong and powerful hunter.

That part reminds me of the Bible again because the first inhabitants in the Book of Genesis were hunters and fishermen prior to Adam.

I remember when I was a kid I would wonder why the turtles withdrew into their shells and I absolutely love it that Gugu is a fish that lives in the water with the turtle. I wish I had a sixth star to give you.

Thank you for sharing this precious story and anxious to go to your site and read the other ones you have written.

Nan


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 24-Sep-2010
    Aboriginals have inhabited Australia for 54,000 years and yes, there are many stories that are similiar to the western Bible. Thanks Nan, bless you - Kay.

reply by Nan Beeson on 24-Sep-2010
    Thanks for the information, and God Bless You, too.

    Nan
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adewpearl
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told her what he did, and she was so impressed - add comma
told her what he had done
Goanna man gave her a spear, when she threw it - replace comma with period
turtle man holding his woman, and so he said - add comma
I'm going to kill you, that is my woman - replace comma with period
thew spears at him, but the - add comma
if you see a turtle, they will swim - if you see a turtle, it will swim
Another fascinating aboriginal story explaining the natural world, Kay - I love that the stories are not only entertaining, but they have this great logic behind them. It all makes perfect sense! And the moral, of course, always adds to the richness of the experience :-) Brooke


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Brooke, Thanks so much for reviewing and correcting; simple stories, glad you enjoy. Love, Kay.
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ENJOY, she says? I am LOVING this, Kace. Your notes at the bottom help me to understand the significance of each story. This is fascinating. Comfortable. Wonderful to read and think about. Pat. xxxx


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thanks darling girl; often the simple things can bring light to our mundane lives. Bless you, Kay.
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cheyennewy
 
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Hi Kay,

I love these Abotiginal stories and you are so good at telling them. I feel bad as I don't have a six for you but it remains in my heart. Keep writing these story poems they are wonderful. Blessings, chey


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Hello Chey, Thanks so much and glad you are enjoying the simple stories. Love, Kay.
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the old guy
 
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Tell us more of these stories, please! Aussie, this is an extremely well written work.As always, I look forward to more of your postings.You have an ability that most of us who try to write would given anything to have!


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thank you my friend, simple stories that bring light and love to our days. Bless you, Kay.
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I enjoyed this story and found it very educational! I was not aware of any of these dreamtime stories. I thought you conveyed the story very well. I thought it was very interesting.


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2010



reply by the author on 23-Sep-2010
    Thank you friend for your kind review, glad you enjoyed the story. Blessings, Kay.
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