Childhood dreams...
A poem about dreams.
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One Moment Can Change A LIfetime


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estrogen
 
 
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The plot thickens. Wow, it's amazing how things shift depending on where the grim reaper decided to land. I loved the build up to this and then the pay off where there was a mistake in addresses. Still sad for the neighbour but made the protaganist ever more grateful for what she had.


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    estrogen,

    Thanks for the kind review and support. Smiles, Carol
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RebelRose
 
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This must be so hard on military wives to see that car pull up to the curb and two officers get out. Feeling relief for themselves and yet shame for feeling that on top of sympathy for the wives who suffered loss. Great story albeit a sad one.

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 Comment Written 28-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Patty,

    Sad for the family and all the other families that are forced to face this tragedy. I so wish these wars would end and stop taking the lives of our young people. Smiles, Carol
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Joan E.
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The suspense you created and the resolution were very effective. I admired the story from the beginning with your use of "chirped" and the countdown, plus the grandmother's vivid description. I also liked your hyperbole: "sucking the life" and "Time stood still." You flash is a terrific contest entry.

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 Comment Written 28-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Joan,

    Thank you so much for indicating what sections of the story entertained you the most. I truly appreciate the kind review. Smiles, Carol
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