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Exquisite and mouth-watering chocolate

  40 total reviews 
Comment by
R. K. Alan
 
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Very nicely done. I can understand why you were awarded with victory. You romantically wove a great tale, communicating a great deal of information in a delightful way. Congrats. Ray aka krylon


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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patmedium
 
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How on earth did I miss this, eh? WHAT a wonderful advert! No wonder you won, Carol ... congratulations, dear, on a well-deserved accolade! I hope they give you a trip to the manufactory as well! xxx


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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Wow! Young lady you definitely need to be writing for a living. Take the winner circle for what it means. Keep writing those advertisements. I'm glad I didn't even attempt to write mine. I thought about it, but yours is the bomb!
A chocolate bomb that is.


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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I'm getting on the train now to head up to Queens... lol. You make Aigner's truly tempting, and congratulations on your contest win!


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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Ms. Gray
 
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Congratulations! You did a grand job with this challenge and you sure did write the winner. I was drooling just reading your love letter to chocolate!


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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geoniasha
 
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Congratulations on your win. Great advertisement. I'm sure the sponsors will love it! I could smell the aroma of the chocolate and all the scrumptious ingredients and the history of the company was thorough without being overbearing. Great piece. geo


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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Amfunny
 
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Congrats on this well deserved win. Your piece is awesome... are you going to take your payment in chocolate? LOL. Excellent writing.


 Comment Written 23-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2011
    My apologies for my tardiness but my thanks is just as sincere...Wishing you the bestin 2011. Smiles, Carol
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MJames82
 
 
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Great story. It took me in right from the beginning and held my eyes captive right up until the end. will have to check out more of your work! Very well done.


 Comment Written 05-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
    I appreciate your kindness and encouragment more than you'll ever know..smiles, Carol
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Nanette Mary
 
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Hullo Carol ....

Those chocolates certain sound delicious and this is so well written that I am wondering if you have shares in the company?! Only joking, of course.
There are just a few changes to suggest ...

* You have - brought their time honored recipes ...
this should be - their time-honored recipes ...
* You have - you're sure to come back for more. Then, in the next sentence, you have - you're sure to find the purest of chocolates. To avoid repetition, I suggest -
you will always find the purest of chocolates.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from ....... Nanette Mary.


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010

    Awesome..your thoughts and the stars..Thank You! Carol
Comment by
L.lora
 
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Your hired, now what was that
you said about "starting salary"?
Advertising such as that is a rare
quality. Excellent in all ways. You
entice your audience with visuals,
aromas and taste and of course appeal
to their decadant pleasure centers with
your well written advertisement. Superb.
Lora


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2010



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2010
    Lora,

    This was a pleasure to write and definitely something I would enjoy doing for a living...writing is my passion...Now if I could only find someone who thought I was worth publishing...Smiles, Carol
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