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Exquisite and mouth-watering chocolate

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BethShelby
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I love chocolate and I think this would sell me on trying their choclolate. I signed up to write something but I wanted to try it before I wrote anything and I couldn't find locally. I guess I could have ordered it of the net but I don't think I want to compete with your mouth watering sales pitch.


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    Beth,

    Thanks so much for your lencouragement and support but you should give it a try too. Chocolate for the sweet tooth is grand you know...Smiles,Carol
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Well that sounds like something I out to look into, but it just goes all around my middle and my hips. I can't stop when I start. Great job.


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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    Joy,

    Neither can I...so I guess I'll just have to be plup. I tell my kids the ads say the dark chocolate (my favorite) lowers blood pressure and the chances of getting diabetes...Healthh food you know. lol Thanks so much...Carol
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I found myself smiling while reading this article. I love chocolate, and your descriptive writing had my taste buds sparking. Your writing is very 'believable', an especially clever touch was to add the e mail address. This is a really strong contest entry in my opinion. Good luck.


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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    hotstuff,

    Wouldn't it be "sweet" to win...lol Thanks for the wonderful review..Carol
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Hello Carol what a wonderful entry for the contest.

I love chocolates and YES you made my mouth desire the . From real coconut creams, tart jellies, freshly roasted nuts and liqueurs, fruited morsels to sugar-free or delectable holiday treats


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    Gert,

    I ampleased that you enjoyed my writing. Thank you for all the support. Carol
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I could relate to this poem as I too am a chocoholic. I always feel happy when I eat chocolate. Your piece is a great entry for the contest. It is well written and the presentation is great.


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    MJM

    Yes, I feel happy too when it melts in mu mouth...and not on my hands. lol Thanks for the wonderful comments. Smiles, Carol
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This is really good. Had my mouth watering. If I read this write-up about these chocolates, I would beat a path to the nearest place that sells them. YUMMMM!!!


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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
    Patty,

    Me too! Wouldn't it be "sweet" to win...lol Thanks for the review...Carol
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This is more an advertisement than a story. How old were you when you first tasted the chocolate? What kind was your favorite and why? What was the first smell that hit you when you first entered the store? These are the details of a good story. I look forward to reading your revision.

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 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Sefiros,

    Aigner's Chocolate posted a contest asking for an advertisement with their requirements including the company's history and details. Sorry to disapoint you but it wasn't meant to be a story....so I can't revise it. I've never been there or tasted their chocolate, just following their directions. But thanks for stopping by...Carol
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Hi Carol,

I was in New York last month. Why did I know about this place? I love chocolate, it gives a lift no matter what the problem is. As I read this essay my mouth began to water just thinking about that delectable chocolate. Please excuse me while I go get some. (smile) Well done and good luck in the contest. Blessings, chey


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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Chey,

    Glad you enjoyed it and that I stimulated your senses..I'm a chocoholic too. My last review said I needed to rewrite beause it was strongly lacking...Thanks for lifting my spirits and even without the chocolate. Smiles, Carol

reply by cheyennewy on 29-Oct-2010
    A re-write? Are they daft?
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This is perfect for this compeition Begin Again, loved the picture. I liked the way how you blended fact with opinion, excellent job, good luck in the contest and keep writing!! :)


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Jake,

    My love of chocolate had me drooling all over the key board and screaming for more..thanks for the kind review and wishes..Smiles, Carol
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Judian James
 
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What an interesting contest this is and I understand your love of chocolate as I just finished sharing a piece of homemade chocolate creme pie with a girlfriend! Well done.
Good luck, Carol!


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2010



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2010
    Jude,

    And I thought you were my friend,,teasing me about a homemade chocokate crene pie. LOL thanks for the wonderful review and amybe not so much for the drool..Smiles, Carol
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